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it's not about watercress
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it's not about watercress |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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it’s not about watercress it’s a tap, tap tapping there on the pane of her window-brain an ever incessant knocking on wood her own personal woodpecker, if you would if you could if you should this incessant rhyme time after time and it could, it should if it would go away… perhaps sanity would return one day so her thoughts ramble and amble along lingering and pingering a regretful song along the lines of where and when there and then confused and chagrined she takes it again on the chin past sins who’da thought who’da bought now she’s caught the lesson’s taught but it’s not what she sought for closed doors nevermore comes to mind one more time as she hears the sorry rhyme and wonders “if” she should and “when” she did and continues to ramble incessant like a katydid and wishes it were over she hates to think or dwell in drink when it’s not fun when she’s the one to pay the price a handsome price for loving him who won’t forget there was a where there was a when before his time but not since then it’s the elephant in the room a big gray and obstinate elephant who rants along rumbling and grumbling and getting big foot prints in her sand on her land at its command not hers she’s unsure who let the elephant in? it’s not about watercress and finger sandwiches it’s not about her mom’s time and it’s not about her time ‘cause she never really had one but it’s more about your time and a heed to this call to grab it up and grab it all ‘cause it’s not about watercress it’s about the elephant that someone left in the room. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Loving someone and trying to forget can be like an elephant in the room, very nicely put and I understand. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
you've outdone yourself - this time - totally original - and so full of meaning - that pachyderm - pushed me out of my bed some time ago and is VERY hard to ignore. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, This is an epopee. Put a star on it when you put it away. *L* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, marvellous, magic, loud applause, oh this is good, better, best, I love this. Yes an elephant in the room, oh wow, girl this is........... wonderful. I can hardly type, for clapping my hands. Take care Marsha  Kari, I'll E you soon I promise! And if I don't give me a gentle reminder, drop the elephant on me! Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Loved it!!  Would somebody come get this elephant outta my house!!!!! (I'm sure a lot us here relate to this) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I've been trying to get rid of this elephant for quite a while Sunshine. . . sometimes, you have to leave it instead of it leaving you. . . Wonderful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
This is an excellent poem! I love how the thoughts just pour onto the screen. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I've read several of your poems lately that are so filled with angst...I hope you are ok? Don't let that elephant stomp out the sunshine!!! If you ever want to talk, I'm here! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderful write from you AGAIN. Now about this elephant...Just igore and grasp onto whatever it is that is being blocked by it. Them elephants can be stubborn things though so watch where you step.lol... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This certainly not about watercress at all It's all about your talent What wonderful rhyming and originality Two thumbs up for the "watercress poetess"! Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Can I ditto Elizabeth? *S* This is fantastic, Sunshine! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you everyone, for taking time to read. It is always interesting to see what type of poetry will make us think... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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