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A Mere Damsel |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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If thine arms were branches of rose buds they 'twould not bloom for a king but thee thy blossoms 'twould lie dormant and believe thy buds shalt bloom eternally T'was not thine eyes nor bouquet of thy smile that maketh thee fragrant with thy love my damsel heart most heavy with hope pray, touch if only with thy glove Sir, thee not a vain..dim witted wench but a mere damsel wither'd not with age i' doth worship the temple of thou lips thy tears run'eth, locked within loves cage O, why doth thee cast aside like a twig? arts thou a bootless rude bellied pig? A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
I really like this one. passion is life. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
A mere damsel thou art not indeed But truly thou art a queen Thou hast penned in this small gem Thy feelings for thy king. . . Wonderful Victoria. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Passions Voice I am happy you enjoyed..  Thank you Sven for that very lovely reply.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well! This was as usual lovely and romantic, and then that last line! HA! I know that guy.. I love the way you spit that out at the end. Sandra |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Victoria, Camelot would have been proud to have your pen as a sword...Greatly enjoyed! Robert Joseph |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Sandra..Thank you ..so nice of you to peek in this morning..i thought you would like that part haa... Robert..thank you for the nice compliment.. so glad you enjoyed.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thou hast prayed upon my love of Old English! Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Victoria* A very enjoyable read...and the way you wrapped it up...LOL I loved it!! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Prometheus...Thank you for reading, appreciate you comments.. Butterflies_Dont_Cry..Happy you enjoyed..for some reason the ladies like that part the best haa.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A mere damsel? I think not as beauty in any garden is lofted in the aromas of sincerity and tenderness and you are overflowing with both. Wonderful read. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Mark..very nice of you to say..and i can tell you possess those kind qualities as well.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
makes me feel very gothic, I rivel in that! Great job, Victoria "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you Kathleen..nice to hear from you this afternoon..glad you liked.. A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Victoria, 'twas a great piece please don't amend i loved the twisting at the end you tell it true without a doubt with gothic tales, you have real clout. wouldst that I couldst imitate thy style instead i'll peruse and smile awhile. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you so much kethry..but you have a wonderful style of your own. Thanks for peeking in.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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