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Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-10-23 11:17 AM

On brisk fall evenings
shivery, silky night drapes down
hiding memories of day.

I wish I could travel the night.

To be forgotten by the sun,
and its burning reminders of
things undone.

Lost in the swoon, ecstasy of night.

With the moon's subdued, cool touch
embracing all. All forgotten.
All seems calm, quite.

The slow seduction of star lit lovers.

Wondering through the night
what wonders could be seen,
felt, held close in hand.

What love lurks in shadows.

With no interest for the day
and its ever busy drone of
day to death movement.

I wish I could travel the night.

I leave blue skies to
people tanned and burnt
living in the clasp of those rays.

I have forgotten the day.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 10-23-2000).]

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

1 posted 2000-10-23 11:31 AM

OH yes...wonderfully written...makes me yearn for the dark

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

2 posted 2000-10-23 01:06 PM

I, too, am a child of the night.......this is a poem that draws me in, and keeps me there!! Enjoyed very much....

Follow your dream!

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-10-23 02:08 PM

~I've probably told you a thousand times,...but, I like your writing style. The way your words stretch themselves to reach me. Powerful E. Much so. Thanks for sharing. *Peace.

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

4 posted 2000-10-23 03:46 PM

Thanks for all your comments. I'm glad that you all enjoyed this.

SpitFire-- I'm sure you had but it never hurts to hear it again.

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

5 posted 2000-10-23 03:46 PM

Thanks for all your comments. I'm glad that you all enjoyed this.

SpitFire-- I'm sure you have but it never hurts to hear it again.

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

6 posted 2000-10-24 12:37 PM

ok I'll give you guys one more chance.

Bump-bump-bummmmmmmpppppppp back to the top.

Sorry about the above double post. :P

forne_marin
Member

since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

7 posted 2004-05-04 10:50 AM

Another one of your poems I'll be putting on my favorite's list.

One thing, though. In line 11 you use the word "quite" when I think you mean "quiet". Take a look.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

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