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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Last sad poem, I promise... I offered you my cup of wine, brimming with desire. I offered you my sweetest love, candy coated fire. You drank of it, yet I was full my hunger nearly cured. The sweetness of your burning lips, the all for which I yearned. I offered you a taste of love, no longer just a dream. So sure your hunger was as mine, That's surely how it seemed. You suddenly turned bittersweet, no sugar anymore. You handed back my love to me, and then you slammed the door. Yet still my cup does overflow, love spilling from the top. Why did you change so suddenly? How could those feelings stop? Oh man of sweetest heat and flame, how did it come to this? You left me starving for desert, with just a goodbye kiss... |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Exceptional writing Sandra! What wonderful comparisons and images you've drawn in this piece ... so tender and wrought with emotion. Beautifully written!  Best wishes and hugs to you, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CatalinaMoon~ Ahhhhh ! You write the sad ones so well. Lovely and tenderly done ! ~*Marge*~< !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 10-23-2000).] |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
I always love your poems. You write so well. Keep it up. Krissie I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making you lose ur way I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel ~Touch and Go |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Yet still my cup does overflow, love spilling from the top. Why did you change so suddenly? How could those feelings stop?' Great lines! Very nicely written, Sandra. I like it a lot! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
catalinamoon methinks this man only wanted a cup of coffee.... but rest assured many men desire this cup of wine that you offer... hold on to your dream...James |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
CatalinaMoon, Well done, WOW! You got me thinking! Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sandra... I can feel your heart cry out in this one, my friend.........there will be one to answer that cry.....  Follow your dream! |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
My favorite line: I offered you my sweetest love, candy coated fire Oh, what images that brings!  And the ending was very sharp and conclusive (a good thing! ). Catalinamoon, very nice job!~ Beth [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 10-23-2000).] |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
you have penned this with such an elegance sadness....love your poems, keep on writing, sad or happy, it flows all from the heart. hugs Charisma |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is penned from your heart and your soul...believe me I've bled my share of sad poems here and it has allowed me to move past alot of that pain...so if you need to get it out....Write and we will read and support you...great work~ |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Sad it is, yes, but it just shows how much you have to give and yes....surely, there will be someone wonderful enough to deserve all that you offer and will be thoughtful enough to provide the dessert as well!!!! Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
this is a sad poem, very thought provoking. Food for thought.(dessert?). No pun intended. But a glass of Chardanay sounds fine. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Sandra, great metaphor! It's sad when we're left wanting for more. Take me as I am or watch me as I go |
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