Open Poetry #10 |
Watercolors |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Now I understand. It's true. Puddles, colored, pulling hue... a fade of some transparency, an edge, in dredge-- of loving you.. A pull of paint-- the white, shows through-- loving, loving, loving you... apologies of too much blue-- urgency-- of line, subdued.... if only, I could sign my name... A page of white, forever changed. |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Serenity, I felt every word and every stroke of that brush. Hang in there. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"if only, I could sign my name... A page of white, forever changed." THESE LINES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! they are fantastic. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A pull of paint-- the white, shows through-- loving, loving, loving you... apologies of too much blue-- urgency-- of line, subdued.... if only, I could sign my name... A page of white, forever changed. =================== you paint with your poets pen as well me sweet... and I do so love reading the hues of your heart ... this one is so fragile and full of such longing ... *sigh* we've got it down to a fine art dont we ... as do you and your poetry ... later-me-masterpiece-gator love ya girlie me |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity!...you've captured this feeling very well! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Ohhhhhhhhhh ! Could feel the canvas still wet with the paint of this one. What thoughts you've captured ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
'if only'....very true words. I won't tell you to submit this one (reverse pschology is it working?) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--How wonderfully you have painted this...and the last lines really hit hard..very well done! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sign your name in shades of red showing your heart forever changed showing your soul in shades of blue to the one who can see every hue. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Serenity, This was fabulous my friend!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Serenity,...ahhh...I've found you. Had my fix and am now leaving to let this one linger for a few. Amazing you. Really. Your words totally kick S. Damn. *Peace Woman. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Rushing around today, but wanted to thank everyone for reading---I just love you guys. I truly appreciate your kindness. Thank you much. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful work....with a heart thrill...love it....love it...superb. Charisma |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sign it, serenity....go ahead!! |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
I have to agree with others. This is a beautiful poem and those last two lines are fantastic. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Charisma---thank you so much. I appreciate your kind attention. 'b,deer"---yer too good to me. Thank you. Poets' Sister--thank you very much as well. My gratitude to all...I'm off to read! Thanks! |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Serenity~ This one of the best I have read... it says so much. Deb |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Ms S .. i've read quite a few of yours yanno and this is without a doubt my favourite so far - the last couplet is pretty damn good ... well done indeed ~smile~ (you never saw me serious before did ya? ...lol) philip |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Bloomingrose---thank you kindly, I do appreciate it...now pardon me while I take a swing at Philip.... You've been reading my work, and never told me? and never once invited me to CA? I'm sure I don't know what to think. (But that is not a newsflash.) ROFL....thank you, m'friend. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
serenity, I love the title (simple as it may be) its what drew me in to read. You didn't disappoint me...I see this, and for that I thank you. Robert Joseph |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
awesome! i love this! and love the title too--(i have one of my own with that title! ) hugs, dg my soul is painted like the wings of butterflies...fairytales of yesterday will grow but never die...i can fly--my friends -Queen |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
It is a lovely picture you paint; a lovely song your words sing...I agree, sign the page Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Monet would be jealous. BEAUTIFUL! Ron |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
RJ, dg, peppermint, & Ron--- Thank you all so much...I'm crazed again...hope to catch up on my reading later...You all make me feel so good. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
This is really beautiful Serenity. Wonderfully delighted with the light in which you have painted. it gleaming. Rich |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Serenity-This was sweet and touching, I know and understand waht you mean, a truely nice write. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If you were to give me a canvas of white with no more than one of your smiles or tears then it would be one cherished by me as a masterpiece. |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
Serenity~ This was wonderful!! ~Kelly You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
I love your mind and how disciplined your pen. Wow!! Marcy |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WOW...and shame on me...where have I been!! This is gorgeous!!! S'en...girl you have such a gift!!! And now an artist too...wowsers!! I love this...truly beautiful writing my dear friend~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just wanted to say, wow. I'm just "floored". Shoot...PdV..think I might submit this one...LOL I curtsey, in blush, to the forum... Thank you all much. |
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