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A Night In The Park
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A Night In The Park |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
In the park at night Not another soul in sight Street lights hum in the air The city's silence is so rare A warm breeze begins to blow The tree branches move so slow Leaves rustle on the ground Cutting the silence with their sound I walk through the grass A squirrel runs on past As the park's residents sleep Somewhere in the shadows deep Illuminated in the center Seen from wherever you enter Is a colorful water fountain Where rivers stream from mountains I am captured by its beauty Guarding the night is its duty Gently the water runs aside As a leaf rides the tide Sitting and watching in wonder The fountain's spell I'm under Until the morning breaks And the sun quietly wakes Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Very nice walk in the park. Where I live it is not safe to walk anywhere after dark. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, there's nothing I enjoy more than the park, except perhaps the forest, Jennifer, I loved this. I enjoyed reading and thinking about the beautiful sounds and tranquility that even a park brings. Thank you for posting this one! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ This enfolds such softly presented serenity that I could almost hear the flow of the fountain. Lovely, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It sounds like a beautiful, serene place to be! Just lovely, Lone Wolf! Denise |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, what a lovely journey you've taken me on Lone Wolf! Beautiful, descriptive verse ... such lovely pictures you've left me with, thank you!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
LW, nice poem. . . sounds like a wonderful place to be. . . Well done. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Lone Wolf, I read what you have written and enjoyed it very much. I then closed my eyes remembering what I had read, and could see the park in my mind. Nicely done. Bill |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
LW~ Thanks for the strole in the park, so peaceful the images you've shown...thanks Take care Tracie~ P.S sending a winged ~HUG~ your way Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
inot2B . . . Thank you vbery much for reading. Not sure it is all that safe here either!! Kathleen . . . I enjoy the park very much also. Oh, the forest is enchanting, but I do not get a chance to go there often. I am happy to hear you enjoyed this one my friend. The park always brings me peace. You are welcome for posting this. Thank YOU for reading! Marge . . . Thank you so much. I was hoping it would come across smoothly. I hear the fountain also my friend. Denise . . . It is a beautiful place. Thank you! Kit . . . You are welcome for the verse. Just a view of the park from my eyes. Thanks for accompanying me on the journey. Sven . . . Thank you. Well, you know what a wonderful place it is my friend.  Bill . . . Thanks for reading. It is always nice to hear when the picture comes across as I see it. Tracie . . . You are welcome for the stroll my friend. Anytime. Thank you for the hug!! Sending one back your way!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LW,...I could see you there. Hhm, think I've been there. The park,...at night,...*sigh*. The best time. What a scene your words have built. Take care you. *Peace gurl. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LW~ thank you for taking me for a walk with you in the park.......it was beautiful. -SEA |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'In the park at night Not another soul in sight Street lights hum in the air The city's silence is so rare' Those lines brought such a peaceful and inspirational image to my mind. Great poem! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LW, the water mesmerizes me as well...I enjoyed this... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Can you tell me where I can find these parc. I can feel the serenity peace, the squirel....you have penn it so realistic...great work. Charisma |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LW-- this is so serene and almost magical. i dare say one of your prettiest pieces. then again, i'm a sucker for nature and outdoorsy things. you have penned a very beautiful poem. thanks for this lovely read. take care. amy |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lone Wolf, these images are so peaceful, so calming. I could shut my eyes and see them......Thank you. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Enjoyed the read, well done. Gloom |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Lone Wolf-Thanks for taking me on that walk, lovely imagery here. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Your words have picked me up and gently sat me down in that very park, thankyou! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SF . . . Was that you?? I thought so!! LOL. It is a serene place at night. You take care too my dear friend. SEA . . .You are welcome to come along any time. Thanks! SP . . . Glad to bring you peace. It is rare and should be cherished. Sunshine . . . Thank you for reading. The water is beautiful. Charisma . . . I'll tell, but it will have to be our secret!! LOL. Amy . . . Thanks for the compliment my friend. I have been told that i have a knack for nature pieces. I just try to write it as I see it. Gentle Spirit . . . The highest compliment I could receive. Thank YOU! Gloom . . . Thanks for dropping by!! Gemini . . . You are most welcome my friend. Any time. Eagle One . . . You are welcome my friend. Glad to hear I was gentle. Wouldn't want to drop you or anything!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
LW* Your poetry always speaks to my heart and carries it away in your message...this is beautiful and I've seen such growth in your work in the last months that just makes me soar...beautiful workk my dear friend~ |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
LW, Perfection..absolutely beautiful! Marcy |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh we must go on this walk in the park again soon. I loved that fountain! Pleasure to read LW. ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jennifer this is some of your finest work. You have grown tremendously in your talent and ability to move people with your words. Love ya SIS |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC . . . My dear friend, thank you so much for the kind reply. It means more to me than I can tell you. I feel the same way about your work and it is always a pleasure to read. I think we are both growing here and the sky is the limit. Marcy . . . Thank you!! Irie . . . You just tell me when my friend. Thank you!! The fountain is gorgeous.Jeffrey . . . Nice to see you my friend. I just write what comes to me. Glad you enjoy it. Love ya too BRO!! Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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