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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Ever Near~ Rose washed twilight ... the heavens streaked in lavender shades and lilac hues, the night swallows gather and dance above ... they sing to me a lullaby of blues. Satin skies of black ebony ... orange glow of harvest moon ... cascade of crystalline stars ... all serve to remind ... you were taken too soon. Midnight's translucent mist ... ribbons of gentle, healing, rain, mystical clouds of soft gray comfort ... embrace me and ease my pain. At the calm dark waters edge ... dance iced blue reflections of light ... to again feel you near ... I need only to taste the night. You once promised to give me ... the sun, the wind, the moon, the stars ... and I now know you did ... for my love ... that's where you are. You are the warm winds that whisper to me ... the golden sun upon my face, you are my earth and sky enchanted ... my time transcending into space. Silver laced strands of moonlight shadows ... the celestial glow felt deep within, sparkling rains that fall like diamonds ... glistening like angel dust upon my skin. The first shimmering flakes of winters snow ... azure ice castles in the sky, you are the quiet changing of my seasons ... the forgiving tears angels cry. You are where ever natures grace and beauty can be found, and it is by these gifts ... and my undying love ... we are forever bound. Janet Marie for DeVante' ... always with me *********** No fog clear in the moonlight The stars shine so bright now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touching my face Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close Now I will reach for the stars Because Oh my love, that's where you are ~Vertical Horizon~  ~On The Sea~ Vertical Horizon from the CD Live Stages No fog clear in the moonlight The stars shine so bright now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close Now I will reach for the stars Because Oh my love, that's where you are Chorus: Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea Waves crash break the silence Gulls cry a song of lament I walk on through the stormy night The air cries flash of anger Dark night enshrouds the stranger all alone without you Now I will reach for the stars Because Oh my love, that's where you are Chorus No fog clear in the moonlight The stars shine so bright now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touching my face Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close Now I will reach for the stars Because Oh my love, that's where you are |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
You captured me with the first stanza! I am a sucker for colors, and you have so brilliantly illustrated nature's beauty here! Love it!! sp Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
to be so loved - a consummation devotely to be wished - (far too many wonderful words and phrases to quote) you're a later super poet gater (did I do that right?) |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
beautiful poem,such vivid imagery wonderful poem i especially liked: Midnight's translucent mist ... ribbons of gentle, healing, rain, mystical clouds of soft gray comfort ... embrace me and ease my pain. At the calm dark waters edge ... dance iced blue reflections of light ... to again feel you near ... I need only to taste the night take care , The Jackal no longer afraid of the dark or midday shadows nothing so ridiculously teenage and desperate |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Jan my friend, you have captured the beauty of your love for vante in the most amazing imagery imaginable. I didn't think it possible but you have found a new level to reach as you lept from mere masterpiece to poetic perfection in every means possible in this one. Yes, it "IS" your best to date by far and the 10's are no longer the strength as you excelled beyond that and written a new scale. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey Babe---sorry I'm behind the debut--but this is incredible....I like where you are taking your style these days...fun, ain't it? LOL....getting be like "lace" these days, you are working the thread, lovely one...HUGS, Thelma. Love, Louise love ya much lady. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautiful bittersweet...James |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Janet, Fascinating, clearly showing the beauty of your imagination. Very refreshing. Loved every line. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Strikingly beautiful Janet Marie! Incredible images you've painted with your words here ... these lines simply captured me ... "You once promised to give me ... the sun, the wind, the moon, the stars ... and I now know you did ... for my love ... that's where you are." What a beautiful image this brings to mind, in and of itself ... indeed, they are always close to us JM, all we need do is look around us ... beautiful!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Janet~ this swept me up from beginning to end. no other poetry effects me like yours does. the images you created in this were short of nothing but spectacular. i could see the moon, the black sky. i could feel the sun, and the breeze. your words paint a picture for all to see. and what a beautiful picture you "paint". i love reading your work...because I know that everytime I do, I have gotten a glimpse of what beautiful poetry is. take care. --Amy-- |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Rose washed twilight ... the heavens streaked in lavender shades and lilac hues, the night swallows gather and dance above ... they sing to me a lullaby of blues. Satin skies of black ebony ... orange glow of harvest moon ... cascade of crystalline stars ... all serve to remind ... you were taken too soon. Ohhhhhh Sweets this is beautiful...he was here writing this one with you...weaving these visions within your poets soul...do you see him?...yeppers I know you do. Beautiful work my dear SS this is an exquisite piece of soul shined weave. Love ya...AW's and BF's~ |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Janet, this is absolutely gorgeous writing...I was swept into the ascension of your heart...wonderful!! Robert Joseph |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
JM, this is simply beautiful, filled with wonderful imagery..excellent writing m'dear Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Your poem went super nova and its blinding light just blinded me. Now I'll have to wash my eyes till sight comes slowly back to me. *L* Sy |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
This is very moving, and its written from a full heart. Brings tears to my eyes... hugs, deb |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Simply breathtaking JM - Just lovely and so full of beautiful imagery. Bonnie |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Janet Marie, this is breathtaking, I'm awed, absolutely amazing writing. Mere words cannot descibe the utter beauty of this. Well my mere words can't, maybe a master poet could do you justice, but not little me. It's the imagery, there are a few who have the consumate skill for painting such vivid pictures. Yes I really love this. Take care Marsha  |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jan, There are no words that can possibly describe how I felt when I read this or just how totally amazing your pen of love is, when DeVante pays us a visit. You know how much I adore and admire your talents. Your muse has served you well today, as he always does when he and you share your hearts ......... Thank you again, my loyal friend. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Snowpants ... (cool name...have to tell me about it sometime) TY for the kind words...i think all us poets have a love of the colors of nature. Wil ... yes, it was all consuming and devoted ..and yes you did it right ...gator dude TY sir for the compliments.Jack ... hey you...  so nice to have you stop by for a read...TY my old friend from the dark.Mark ..wow...TY my sweetest critique ... (me thinks ya have those Rose colored glasses on) What can I say to such a beautiful, encouraging reply ...but if your words are to be accepted then you must take part of the credit as it is your amazing gift of imagery that made me want to strive for this poem. So, I thank you twice ...once for this glowing reply and then again for the inspiration. As for the scale...you tipped that a long time ago..all the 10s belong to you love ya cowboySen .. yes babes...it IS FUN... its POETRY *smile* and when I figure out what my "style" is... I will be sure and let ya know.. me and me mooody muse thanks ya Thelma and Louise??? did they write poetry  *winkiewinkie* love ya back SBJ ...TY.. yes he is beautiful and I know the poems sometimes read bittersweet and sad but i truly do celebrate him in every line. David... thank you sir, I dont think I've ever been called fascinating before, but i could get used to it LOL...so pleased you enjoyed. Kit... Thank you my sweet poetgatorgirl that was one of my fav lines too...inspired and borrowed from the song I posted .. it so perfectly defines his presence. Amy ... and every time I read one of your replies .. its like reading poetry you flatter me to new heights TY sunshine ...love ya too Holly ... yeppers ... see him, feel him, all of it ...thank you for such a beautiful butterfly reply.. but then it takes one to know one ... love ya me SSRobert...your reply is absolutley gorgeous as well Thank you poet sir..very much!! Maree ... thank you so much for the excellent m'dear .. so nice to see ya Sweet Sy .. TY so much... but me thinks on your worst day...your eyes of wisdom still would see and know all ...ya shot me into cyberspace with your reply Deb... thank you for letting my words move you like this,so nice to have you stop by . Bonnie, thank you so much for your sweet reply.. and for comming by to read. Marsha ... your "mere" words were anything but ... I hardly know what to say to such a kind reply I hope thank you will do. thanks much for the read and compliments Marina ... my goodness...TY my sweet friend, Me and me moody muse thank you SO much for such a fantastic reply ..you humble us both thank you loyalgatorgirl THANK YOU ALL for such BEAUTIFUL replies. take care me sweet fellow gator poets jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Masters wall of visions gallery....up you go |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ "You once promised to give me ... the sun, the wind, the moon, the stars ... and I now know you did ... for my love ... that's where you are." this touched my heart so deeply....I love your poetry. v -SEA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--I'm sorry to be so behind on my replies...also to your e mail...I don't think I can say it better then the others...this poem is a light...and it comes from your heart...and it is made of love. Love you gater!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
and all this time I thought you were just another pretty face!!! Jan, this is really beautiful and the way you have woven your colors, images, words and message is spectacular. How you shine in these old eyes! |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Beautiful, Janet!A very particular style, a very pleasant, particular style. An excellent somehow soothing read. ~ Beth |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dear Janny You have incredible talent my friend and this piece is so incredible. Janny he will always be with you, in your heart, soul and head and almost certainly all around you HUGS Love Tracie~ P.S and of course in your poetry Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Mark ... thank you twice my friend Sea ...Thank you so much sweetie ... and I love YOUR replies Martie ...no sorries me sweet. real life takes us away from poetry land...I understand. thank you for always seeing his light in me love you too. Sweet'Deer ... poetic eyes.. yes ... old .. NOPE ...not ever ... Thank you for allowing me shine in their grace. Beth ... thank you very much . I often write of him in this line break style ...but I dont have a clue what its called ( ... ) ty for such a kind reply. Tracie ...thank you my sweet poet pal yes...always..and TY for always making me smile with your warm replies. THANK YOU ALL love ya love poetry land JM |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
OH MY you have really outdone your self with this you conjured up every beautiful element of nature in this and then wrapped it up with your love for vante sis i love love love this one im going to be using all your printers ink today haha and i hope you dont mind me bringing these up but i want them in my private library for when i do get to be here marks imagery has been a really good influence on you, it has made you try writing in this style and just look at what a natural you are at it my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Janet Marie, this is absolutely breathtaking! A masterpiece! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sis...your gonna spoil me today.....thank you and yes Marks amazing gift of writing with such vivid imagery inpsired me to want to strengthen that element in my poetry.. you know my poetry...usually a bleed of emotions, Denise....THANK YOU for such a beautiful reply!!!! thnks very much thanks again to all who replied to this and again to Mark for the inspiration and lessons. (i guess your rubbing off on me huh cowboy) jm |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, this was just amazing. I trully love it when your soul gets into a piece.. hugs and kisses my friend. Parker |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
P-man...thank you for this amazing reply... and for your heart and soul too... your such a true friend...thank you for that. bearhugs and smooches to you too. thank you all for the wonderful replies love to poetry land jm |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
how beautiful to feel such love....how I know these feelings....your heart emotion was felt here.....for that~Thank you Greeneyes~ "True love is like ghosts, which everybody talks about and few have seen." -La Rochefoucauld~~~~~~~` "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
My God Janet... you've flowered into such an expressive poet...the lines in this are beautiful...a cascade of images flowing down the page full of honest yearning reflections and I don't care what anyone says... your words are better than Vertical Horizon's words......some may disagree but I happen to know better.................... |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
JM~ Well now, I thought the last one I read was the best but now... You my dear have really stepped into the poetry that says who you are. From your soul these words seem to slip into your pen and explode in vision. Wonderful write. Deb |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Thank you for one of the most breathtaking pieces I've seen today. And as Balladeer said when are we going to see your beautiful face? Your poetry certainly shines! I guess we all "see" each other that way!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
An artist friend that I knew and who had passed away was a dear friend of mine. He painted skies of lavender hue, whenever I see a sunset with lavender, I think of him. Thank you for taking me there, a very lovely written piece. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
green eyes...thank you very much...I too always relate to the meaning of your poetry and am always touched by your words. I was hoping you would get a chance to see this one. Im glad your back here with us again. E-babes... my goodness sweets.. your gonna spoil me rotten with these wonderful replies. THANK you so much....you know how I adore and respect your work, so these kind words mean much to me....truly. Deb....thank you very much for this beautiful, sincere reply.....I appreciate it more than you know. Kath.... thank you for your generous reply my sweet friend....yes we are all beautiful with pen in hand...one of the gifts of poetry. gemini ... Im very pleased my words helped bring back a memory for you. thank you for sharing with me. thank you all VERY much for such wondeful replies jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You know why I needed to read this again tonight Love you SS and love him for bringing me to you. Because now I have no doubt that he did Exactly that  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~~~~~~~~~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 04-27-2001).] |
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