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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Schoolboy In one step I brush aside the world and in one breath, I'm wrapped by a whisper -- soft and coddling. Like a schoolboy I'm whisked away in a dream, writing your name in pastel chalk across the blackboard of the midnight sky. Hanging my passions on your star, I take a deep breath sipping the quiet -- like a tonic, it heals me. Lost, yet unafraid I travel effortlessly within the sphere of light birthed by your evolution. So calm -- a traveler within the composition of your heartbeat. The rise and fall of your breath like the seductive swaying of a baton in the conductor's hand...I fall like silk across your arms, unbound in the cradle of your care. © Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Like a schoolboy I'm whisked away in a dream, writing your name in pastel chalk across the blackboard of the midnight sky. Beautifully written piece. There not like love to make one feel like a little kid again. excellent poem. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
When there is love in the heart then the child in all of us has a tendancy to rise to the surface. The wonderful feeling of freedom and joy in all we see and do. Great read from from you. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
That is when we know we are in love..when we feel like a teenager all over again..nicely written Robert as always..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW! Robert, you are really a talented writer! It is always a pleasure to read your poems! Beautiful images you create in my mind, time after time! Well done! Denise |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Thank you, Brian...your thoughtful response is greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph Mark, Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to respond. Glad you enjoyed it. Robert Joseph Victoria, Thank you for responding so kindly, I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph Denise, thank you so much, your generous response is deeply appreciated. It pleases me to know you found so much to enjoy. Robert Joseph |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Robert Joseph--so many lovely images...your writing is fresh and original.. favorites... , writing your name in pastel chalk across the blackboard of the midnight sky. hanging my passion on your star ...I fall like silk across your arms, unbound in the cradle of your care. Very much enjoyed this poem!! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
RJ - i'm not to lazy to type or copy and paste - really - but Martie said exctly what I would say and not one word would I change - I know this feeling - not in the past but the present - know how wonderful it feels - but you've said it most beautifully ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"seductive swaying of a baton in the conductor's hand..." This is excellent imagery and phrasing, I really enjoyed this entire poem. Kathleen |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Like a schoolboy I'm whisked away in a dream, writing your name in pastel chalk across the blackboard of the midnight sky Lost, yet unafraid I travel effortlessly within the sphere of light birthed by your evolution. I fall like silk across your arms, unbound in the cradle of your care .. gorgeous. The entire poem is just _gorgeous_. Robert Joseph, you make me wish you had a crush on me, just to see my name immortalized on your canvas. *sigh* I should swoon.  ~ Beth |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"I fall like silk into your arms"....this line and others....smooth as silk and a pleasure to read...James |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Martie, Thank you for your kind response, I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph Bill, Thank you for taking the time to respond. I appreciate your thoughtful recognition of my writing. Robert Joseph Kathleen, Thank you for responding so kindly, your kindness is greatly appreciated. Robert Joseph Beth, Thanks so much, I'm flattered by your generous response...shhh, don't say too much about having a crush, my fiance might hear you...smiling. thanks, again! Robert Joseph James, thanks for responding, I'm pleased to know you found something to enjoy in this piece. Robert Joseph |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This just whispers to me...soft and sweet |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Thank you, Paula...I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this piece. Robert Joseph |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
"I fall like silk across your arms, unbound in the cradle of your care" *sigh* You know what this piece means to me...but I just had to say something again. perfectly placed words that capture the heart over and over again. ~ek |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Neve, It's a treasure knowing your delight can be found in my words. ~enb~ [This message has been edited by Robert Joseph (edited 10-22-2000).] |
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