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How Can I Say Good-bye
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How Can I Say Good-bye |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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How Can I Say Good-bye Would you have me say good-bye On such a night as this With rings of love strung round the moon And into star’s abyss The winds are warm, the evening young The moment’s right for love And little stars are flirting with us In the sea above The cricket chirps, the night owl hoots The earth goes round again How can we stop life’s yearning With a word of sudden end Good-bye is such a heavy song To ooze from out this heart A requiem to mark the tides That force two souls apart How can my lips voice sorrow’s wake Through yearnings of a kiss How can you have me say good-bye On such a night as this Elizabeth Santos |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend~ What a lovely, lovely write. 'Would you have me say good-bye On such a night as this With rings of love strung round the moon And into star’s abyss' Oozes with the beauty of the night and wanting to hold it forever. *Hugs* to you, sweet poet. Love you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--there is no perfect time for goodbye is there...there will always be something too beautiful to be missed by two...Beautifully written, dear Liz...as all your poetry is. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Good-bye is such a heavy song To ooze from out this heart A requiem to mark the tides That force two souls apart" What a beautiful, flowing read Liz ... you've painted such an exquisite night, and indeed, it would be difficult to say good-bye amidst such wondrous sights and emotions. Beautiful theme!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautifully done, very touching, Elizabeth. Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, An exquisite good-bye. Sy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Never should there be a good-bye when the beauty around you can still be seen. That alone tells you that the good-bye is wrong otherwise you would never see between the tears. Excellent write. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Heartrendingly beautiful. My prayers are with you, as I wonder how it's going. The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You shouldn't even try, my friend... Such words aren't necessary - Perhaps - "Until later..."? |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Liz, BRAVO !! This is a wonderful poem with picturesque description and wonderful meter. This gets my special tribute to poems that conduct emotion like electricity from one heart to another. My heart to heart award:  To [This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 10-14-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is trademark beauty from you, Liz... gave me little chills...sad, and sweet and brimming over with love! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Love and Prayers, dale Writing isn't just something I do, it's something I am. To write of feelings that touch all hearts in some manner is my delight. -Marge Tindal |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely writing...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is lovely, I like the way it was expressed and everything about it. Kathleen |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I have always found goodbye to be the hardest word to say, wonderful writing. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can almost hear Robert Goulet singing.... Mrs. Santos...you are an amazing woman.. Have you ever imagined a world with no hypothetical situations? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all very much for the remarks. Actually, Balladeer, I env1sion Ricky Martin singing that refrain Your comments were all very kind Thanks Liz |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good evening Elizabeth, Very well done, and very touching. I'm glad I came by, to read and enjoy what you have written. Bill |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
That you can be so heartfelt AND do wonderful meter, flow and rhyme - never ceases to astound me - whatever truth lies in these words - You have my prayers - there's no easy answers ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Would you have me say good-bye On such a night as this With rings of love strung round the moon And into star’s abyss The winds are warm, the evening young The moment’s right for love And little stars are flirting with us In the sea above ============== oh Lizzie what gorgeous, wonderful imagery.. all dressed up in your gift of cadence and perfect rhyme flow.. and the bittersweet emotions tug at the heartstrings with poetic grace.. poetry in motion my sweet friend ...you are  jm |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
This is has such a wonderful rhythm... and Liz, your imagery! A few favorite lines: Would you have me say good-bye On such a night as this With rings of love strung round the moon And into star’s abyss A requiem to mark the tides That force two souls apart Very heatfelt. ~ Beth |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Bill, Thanks for reading and for your kind remarks Wilfred, Your comments are warming. Thanks you so much Jm, Thanks, dear, For all those kind words Elizabeth. I wish I had an ounce of the gift of imagery from your poetic mind. Thank you so much for your comments Liz |
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Broken_Winged_Angel Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 994Small Town, Somewhere |
The first two lines had me hooked...and I loved the whole poem... Once again you've created a masterpiece...  With a little piece of tomorrow, You'll have to kiss yesterday goodbye. Because today won't last forever, And the past will only make you cry. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Elizabeth-- this is beautiful! stunning images and feelings you have captured here. i love the peace and traquility of the poem. but i also like the quite intensity that is echoed with each line. wonderful job. my favorite stanza is below...but the whole piece was wonderful!Good-bye is such a heavy song "To ooze from out this heart A requiem to mark the tides That force two souls apart How can my lips voice sorrow’s wake Through yearnings of a kiss How can you have me say good-bye On such a night as this" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, Elizabeth... |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
One almost hopes for pathetic fallacy at times like the one you describe. Be it a funeral on a sunny day, or a goodbye on a perfect night, it seems to hurt a little more. Such a melodious and graceful poem! |
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FlyHigh Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 84Bekkestua, Norway |
So nicely written. And it brings tears in my eyes.. I have said goodbye, and it's to darn hard. gJ -- "Luck affects everything. Let your hook always be cast; in the stream where you least expect it there will be a fish." Ovid (BC 43-18 AD) |
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