as i lay upon her verdant bed ...

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ma miller
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

0 posted 2000-10-13 05:15 PM

as i lay upon her verdant bed ...

my touch upon her leaf's olived youth
so tenderness does reach an impressed stage
of aging's graceful longlived phase
my feel against a gingered sooth
reveals her delicate growing ways

a flower to hope comes of her lofty dreams
from seeds well sown before my novice time
of gardening's patient passioned rhymes
while a verse to cite barely seems
inadequate to frill her lines

as water feeds the food of greenest fruit
her soil delights in giving gifts so pure
as golden's sight of the sunlight stores
her life's stretching malachite shoots
towards bright sky of azure's tour

her crowning deed blooms velvet's fuchsine
upon the abundance of glen's wild spread
for my valiant tasks to secure her stead
she gives me a glimpse of heaven's cuisine
as i lay upon her verdant bed

M.A. Miller
10.13.00

My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

1 posted 2000-10-13 05:22 PM

Miller, this is absolutely splendid I cannot choose a verse I adore more than the other as each line read is elegant..

Coco

ma miller
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

2 posted 2000-10-13 07:27 PM

thanks for reading Coco and your kind words ...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-10-13 10:25 PM

as water feeds the food of greenest fruit
her soil delights in giving gifts so pure
as golden's sight of the sunlight stores
her life's stretching malachite shoots
towards bright sky of azure's tour

her crowning deed blooms velvet's fuchsine
upon the abundance of glen's wild spread
for my valiant tasks to secure her stead
she gives me a glimpse of heaven's cuisine
as i lay upon her verdant bed
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Mark...
this is a VERY cool poem...
very well written and conceived ..
and the thing that struck me the most was the
very unique and creative imagery choices ..
wonderful vocabulary use as well
superb writing, putting this in my library
take care
jm

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2000-10-13 10:29 PM

oh boy, I like this very much

Kathleen

Athena, Goddess of Wisdom
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since 1999-11-21

Posts 27

5 posted 2000-10-13 11:53 PM

What's your phone number?

Seriously, excellent writing. No wisdom can I add to it.

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

6 posted 2000-10-14 03:40 PM

Janet Marie, Irish Rose, Athena ... thanks so much for reading ... this piece is an experiment for me and one which i plan to conduct again ... thanks again ...

p.s. Athena ... never had quite a reply ... thanks.

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-10-14 04:08 PM

I enjoyed this quite alot...I do love watching you stretch and leap with your work...much admiration, MA

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

8 posted 2000-10-15 11:22 AM

serenity ... thank you once more for reading and your kind words

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

9 posted 2000-10-15 12:28 PM

ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL this poem have stolen my breath... wow...

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

10 posted 2000-10-16 04:17 AM

I feel like I should press my hand to my forehead and swoon with a sigh. Oh, this is ... this is... *sigh* ~swoons~

~ Beth

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

11 posted 2000-10-16 10:03 AM

thank you Brian ... i have a great respect for your work and i appreciate you taking the time to read ...

swoon and sigh ... oh my ... thanks so much, Beth ...

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

12 posted 2000-10-16 12:04 PM

most excellent( hope I don't sound like Bill and Ted

) Truly beautifully crafted - I hope your loved one appreciates it as much as we here

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

13 posted 2000-10-17 10:49 AM

much thanks to such a prolific poet ... thanks for reading, Wilfred

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