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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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downward spiral lower and lower I slid into the bowels of hatred until I could feel the tips of hell's fire reaching for my soul upwards from here the only reasonable option drinking the healing words pouring forth I found a foothold and slowly started the climb trying to forget that this was not and would never be love and grasping only towards the promise of friendship I progressed upward but the coldness impeeds frostbite numbs from the inside out and today sadly, yet again the downward spiral takes me I don't know why I let it a lifetime of slipping letting go too easily I could say it was the recoil from the slice of your ever sharp tongue cutting at my fragile hold but maybe this time if I was honest I would say I let go because I missed the heat [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-01-2000).] |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Corazon, I really liked this. I've done the 'downward spiral' myself a few times, until I got tired of the 'heat. DiObear |
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brandondinsmore Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 142OKC, OK |
indeed, corazon. how i have felt these same ways and these equal feelings. ev'rything seems hopeless sometimes, yet something keeps you always yearning for this thing which can overwhelm us so easily, Love. Oh how I lothe Love sometimes, but then i remember that i can't, for i have never truly loved or been loved... true words come from your heart, and treasured they shall be... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This is excellent writing, Corazon!! I'm sure we've all experienced that spiral a few times. I especially loved the ending, too! Denise |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
DiO, brandon, denise, thank you much  ...it is my life right now, till I find a way to break the cycle...*sigh*....but I haven't stopped trying |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very good writing...so honest, and I loved the last part! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well, I've set up residence on rock bottom... providing you with a nice soft landing spot. *G* So if you'd be so obliging, please land gently. LOL Great poem, sad lady! |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Very nice work, Corazon! Right now I'm in about the same position on the spiral as you are...it's no fun, is it? But, you have to say...this, too, shall pass. Hopefully soon! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
martie, thanks suthern...lol@land gently....how bout you just scoot over and I will join you....sigh...thanks for the smiles...coming from rock bottom, they mean much wrmheart...yep....and thanks I needed to read that today....this too shall pass...*long deep sighs* |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corazon, this seemed ever personal, a slide into the abyss, sometimes we go there just to help us escape. loved the read. Parker |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
C~ I think you hit the mark on this one. The honesty of it made it special. Good writing. best regards, bboog |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ I always enjoy your writing. Hope the 'spiral' picks you up and brings you back to the top. *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
haleyja, thanks, and yes you might be right...escaping is a coping mechanism...I hadn't thought of that bboog...thank you marge...thanks...and yep me too *looking up with hope* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you wrote me here |
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