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desperado
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0 posted 2000-04-27 10:15 PM



as the wind danced with her vibrant hair
and the moonlight sparkled in her eyes
my tears were freed by her beauty
and rushed by her goodbyes
her tanned skin so sleek and smooth
my body aches to feel her energy
to hold her electric body
as it's pulse creates a soothing harmony
oh her lips of absolute pleasure
to touch them would be a treasure
yet to kiss would fuel a wild fire
rivaled only by my hearts desire
and her vioce is as soft as a dream
covering my body with it's arrousing sound
so I'll close my eyes and wait once more
till the love of my life can be found...




 "There were times in my life
when I was going insane
tryin to walk through
the pain
when I lost my grip
and I hit the floor
yeah I thought I could leave but couldn't get out the door" - Aerosmith "Amazing"

© Copyright 2000 James Webster - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
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Washington
1 posted 2000-04-27 11:08 PM


Desperado - this is well written -
I enjoyed it a lot.

netswan

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2 posted 2000-04-28 01:13 AM


Desperado~
This one has *sighs* written all over it.

'my tears were freed by her beauty
and rushed by her goodbyes'

What a unique poetic thought.
I sure enjoyed the read of this one.
~*Marge*~


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Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-04-28 01:21 AM


WOW...
very cool poem!!
reads like a song even.
very good visual and emotional imagery.

"my tears were freed by her beauty
and rushed by her goodbyes"

very cool line
enjoyed the read
jm


 Is it too much to find an answer,
Is it too much to hold you close.
Is it too much to find a reason,
Is it too much to free my soul --
From self control ...
And I know you're always waiting for me ...
You take me far away,
And I know you're holding me ...
And it's better now ...
~vertical horizon~



kristi
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since 2000-04-24
Posts 33
Yulee, FL
4 posted 2000-04-28 02:22 AM


Great poem.  If only all men were so passionate!

 Two men look through the same bars. One sees the mud, and one the stars.-?

pen of passion
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5 posted 2000-04-28 08:34 AM


Desperato, very nice.  I enjoyed the read.
desperado
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since 1999-05-24
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FT Hood,Tx
6 posted 2000-04-30 02:24 PM


thanks for the comments guys.  here I am sunday afternoon, sunburned and worn out, but the weekend was great.  hehe  thanks once again.
passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2004-05-02 09:24 PM


hopefully you won't wait long
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