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desperado
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx

0 posted 2000-04-27 01:33 AM

twisted sideways and torn inside out
blackend highways and maps made of doubt
ripped from the socket by lonesome dispair
out of control; no chance of repair
burning desires carefully known
nothing inspires the love you have shown
clinging on the wall you wished destroyed
burned by the fire you once had enjoyed
never saw the shadows you just had to make
never heard the echos of the hearts you did break
blind to the tears that silently fell
trapped inside your loving hell
I wish you could hear the screams you have caused
for once in your life that heart might have paused
and all of the pain you made would be clear
as your eyes would make it's own poisonous tear
a tear of cyanide to roll down your face
lonely and unforgiving to put you in your place
so swallow your tear and save your dead soul
for only the death of your evil will make you whole

shine a light so bright that all can see
and you will find the joys that echo within me

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

1 posted 2000-04-27 01:37 AM

WOW!!!
This is powerful yet sad and dark. It brings to mind one word "Heartbreak"

All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

bobbycat
Member

since 2000-02-06

Posts 233
USA

2 posted 2000-04-27 02:12 AM

Ouch....I can just feel the pain from this one. Very emotional, very well written.

Bobbycat =^..^=

[This message has been edited by bobbycat (edited 04-27-2000).]

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 2000-04-27 02:28 AM

Deep thoughts here, James. I love it when you get philosophical on me. Glad to see ya back - you've been missed.

Michael

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

4 posted 2000-04-27 04:05 AM

This is sooo deep and dark, alot of emotion vented. I loved it

Tracie~

Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

5 posted 2000-04-30 02:30 PM

wickedly haunting, many levels of meaning... lots of great lines in here

i especially thought the last two lines were very effective.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-05-02 09:24 PM

ouch...damn

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