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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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It is remarkable and you I catch that word turn it inside shivered out and I have scuffed the fallen leaves stared at the sky darkly covered with clouds of my own mind wandered wondering where it is I am felt the dirt beneath me like my soul a fitting emptiness I see all around so many faces revolve my edges unknowing they can’t see the sunlit air as I you stand occupying spaces I familiarised long ago it is remarkable it is floodly fallen a dream to here I will run and the wind will bend an open sky might carry me it is the beat of one day soon I say when next to the space of years it is release relived and relieved 'One day maybe you will see the land Touch skin with sand You've been swimming in the lonely sea With no company Oh, don't you want to find? Can't you hear this beauty in life? The roads, the highs, breaking up your life Can't you hear this beauty in life?' ~The Verve~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"when next to the space of years" Yes. A lot of tiem related subjects here lately. Interesting to say the least. This line K., (and of course I loved all of them) caught me up. It shows in one breath the virulence of relativity. When a space of an instant is shadowed by the whisper of a decade, that instant seems not so deafening anymore, not so heavy. Much to ponder here little butterfly. And I will of course, because your words always do that to me! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
HI BUTTERFLY SLIPPERS ICON SHARER  what is remarkable is this poem... its presentation is perfect and its emotions are pure and hauntingly beautiful excellent writing Kam, truly effecting words later-slipper-gator jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
This is lovely and has great imaginary imagery ~netswan |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You certainly do know how to set a mood, Kamla....another exquisite piece |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...understated and powerful at the same time....like "floodly fallen"....mmmm... reads like a feather and hits with a bang... "remarkable" yerself, here... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kamla, both this poem and yourself are remarkable!!!  Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I read this twice, each time I was left shunned. you stand occupying spaces I familiarised long ago it is remarkable it is floodly fallen a wonderful poem, great atmosphere. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Outside open mouthed crowds Pass each other as if they're drugged Down pale corridors of routine Where life falls unatoned " "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kamla~ Absolute beauty in your words. Gifted you are. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
There are just so many images. Beautifully sculpted. Especially fond of "felt the dirt beneath me like my soul". Just great... |
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