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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 2000-06-08 10:11 PM


lover's yearning
passion burning
lessons learning
heads turning

your eyes
love's guise
hidden surprise
no good-byes

your heart
missing part
new start
feelings impart

carnal desire
both admire
we tire
extinguishing fire

your touch
too much
life's such
loving bunch

we begin
enter in
i grin
pleasure wins




 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

© Copyright 2000 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
CocoBaci
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1 posted 2000-06-08 10:13 PM


Wolf, I have 1 word 4 your 2 word verse ...
W O N D E R F U L
Coco  

SpitFire
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Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-06-08 10:22 PM


~LW,...oh this takes the cake. The title??? superb...the content...your talent...mmm,,...superb as well.  So well done. Aside from that....I think I am reading into an event that has taken place that may have been a bit painful????  Kick me if I'm wrong. hehe.  Take care you. *Peace.
Tennessee Angel
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Tennessee
3 posted 2000-06-08 11:19 PM


Lone Wolf --  This is phenomenal!  The title intrigued me.  I don't know how I almost missed it.  Precise and to the point.  No use in wasting precious words, right?  

 "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-06-09 01:38 AM


LoneWolf~

You rock
You roll
I read
I scroll

I like
I do
You rock
YOU DO !

*Girl ... this one is brilliantly creative.
I might just have a go at it.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-06-09 01:50 AM


fan the fire
feel my desire
flames reach higher

kiss me once
kiss me twice
take me to paradise


heat with in
under the skin
taste this sin...


OK Ill stop or we'll have to go to adult LOL

way cool poem LW
nice with spice
later-hot- gator  
jm


Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
6 posted 2000-06-09 02:09 AM


Lone Wolf,
is cool,
is true,
poet wonderful.

Two words,
Of love,
Of Pleasure,
Like Treasure
.....

Ok, enough of tom foolery from me, I am no good at this, so I simply stick around to saying that this one is a good poem, very unique and a brilliant idea...

Many regards, sudhir.
Back to the closet of pink floyd...

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall

EagleOne
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since 2000-03-07
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Between a laugh and a tear...
7 posted 2000-06-09 03:48 AM


You can say alot with just two words, great work!

 God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



netswan
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8 posted 2000-06-09 06:15 AM


Wow Lonewolf. This was cool -- Well done

~netswan

Jeffrey Carter
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9 posted 2000-06-09 06:51 AM


Lone Wolf,
Very kewl poem m'friend

Sorry, I haven't caught you on ICQ in a couple days, I've been a bit under the weather  
feeling a little better now though

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep


Dark Angel
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10 posted 2000-06-09 07:10 AM


Hey LW, this is sooooooo Kewl sooooo creative and sooooo fantastic!!  loved it.  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
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11 posted 2000-06-09 09:31 AM


LW~
well worded
your poem
of two

brought the
best out
in you

GREAT  
TC~
< !signature-->

 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe




[This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 06-09-2000).]

amazon_lover
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Dublin,Ireland
12 posted 2000-06-09 11:14 AM


beautiful poem
two words!!!!!!

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
13 posted 2000-06-09 11:22 AM


LW~
Your two words sure do say A LOT.
I LOVED this poem!! You write with
such deep expression with just a few
lines...amazing. did i mention, i really
loved this poem?! lol. take care my
friend.
amy  


 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




Colin
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Callington, Cornwall, England
14 posted 2000-06-09 11:45 AM


Two words:
Well done!

Eric

Danny Holloway
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Tulsa, OK
15 posted 2000-06-09 12:46 PM


LW, your a Lady of few words.  Two will do!
~~very nice writing~~

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

16 posted 2000-06-09 02:53 PM


You write.
I grin...
nuff said?
Do again...

Lone Wolf
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Lansing, MI USA
17 posted 2000-06-10 05:13 PM


Thank you to all who took the time to read and reply to my two words.  I am very touched by the response I got from this one.  Special thanks to Marge and JM for their replies...you two are the best!!  

Serenity...will do, but I think I am going to adult with JM!!  LOL  


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

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