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My Favorite Poem (JM's Challange)
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My Favorite Poem (JM's Challange) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Although I've met a lot of challanges on Passions, this was perhaps one of the hardest to meet..I have a lot of poems I consider my favorites and all for many different reasons, be it the message or the format. I chose this one because it in itself was a challange and probably the most difficult poem I've ever written in my life. The challange was to write and Acrostic Sestina...either one a feat, but coupled together...pure hell  Anyway, this was the result of that challange and to me the message means everything. I was that bird who dreamed of flight and found my wings over a year and a half ago when I left an abusive marriage...I'm still not real good on these wings, but learning day by day and flying is wonderful She Dreamed Of Flight (An Acrostic Sestina) She lived trapped in a gilded cage Open doors only a dream Mystical the clouds for her Eyes forever on the skies Transfixed with images of flight Inspired by her damaged wings Molted feathers from her wings Encased the bottom of her cage She wondered if she’d ever fly Ever realize her dreams Venture high up in the skies Enchanting clouds surrounding her Night after night, dreams came to her As she longed to spread her wings Soft, misty visions of blue skies Intrigued her there within her cage Nights haunted by these longing dreams Gave rise to days with hopes of flight Lost in images of flight Each day became a quest for her Forever reaching for her dreams Envisioned flight on flawless wings Avenging life within her cage Transcending bars to reach the skies Harbinger to freedom’s skies Enraptured in her quest for flight Resigned no more inside her cage Songs of reproach emit from her Enticing her to spread her wings No longer lost within her dreams Outward now, beyond her dreams Unleashed she rises in calm skies Gracefully on outstretched wings High in the cloudy air she flies Taken once, freedom’s now hers Outside the bounds of her own cage Far away, now, from her gilded cage Life had once been cruel to her Yet through her dreams, she learned to fly  Sometimes even a single feather's enough to fly < !signature--> To love means never to be afraid of the windstorms of life: should you shield the canyons from the windstorms you would never see the true beauty of their carvings. ~Elizabeth Kubler-Ross [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 06-09-2000).] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Oh Lady Hoot this is indeed lovely......and deserves more justice than I could ever give...... It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Ruth I remember this, it is so beautiful hon and it still touched me deeply ...."Sometimes even a single feather is enough to fly" ... how true! have missed you Ruth. Love you Maree Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
By all the powers vested in me, Elation Raged a war inside my head, fierce Into this spiral, I move in admiration Loving each bit of this work of art from peers, Lulling me into mental incapacitation. Intoxicated by sheer beauty's fixation, Adoring each word as it comes, to my sight Never have I imagined the presentation, To have been penned by this rustic in plight... BRILLIANT is what brilliant gets, shining, dazzling by mere presence, RUTH, you have really a great piece here, that I can sit and admire, adore, accolades galore.... Many regards, sudhir.< !signature--> My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-10-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sudhir Iyer..wow, what can I say but thank you. Wonderful acrostic although I'm not sure that I am deserving it, but thank you so much David...thanks DA...I miss you too hon |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Harbinger to freedom’s skies Enraptured in her quest for flight Resigned no more inside her cage Songs of reproach emit from her Enticing her to spread her wings No longer lost within her dreams a wonderful poem especially the above verse. Sometimes even a single feather's enough to fly I love that image wonderful wisdom. Excellent poem as always Ruth. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I can understand why this is your favorite. INCREDIBLE WRITING! from our Princess of Poetry. dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
meknows, you deserve it Ruth, and please call me, sudhir.... I had most fun writing it, and I am glad you liked it.......and you are welcome warm regards |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Ruth, first let me say that I understand completely how hard it was for you to choose a favourite poem of yours because every single poem that you have shared with us is a gem! This is an amazing acrostic sestina for many reasons 1) They are hard to write and yours is perfection and expressed so deeply and well 2) The subject matter: My Mom had a marriage like yours and I commend you for having the courage to do the right thing and leave before it was too late. Abuse is a very hard subject for me to talk about and think about, people who don't experience it can't even understand and I am truly sorry that it had to happen to you. On the bright side, it allowed you to write this poem and spread your wings I am so glad that you have wings now to fly and experience happiness once again Challenge well met!Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How well I remember this one, Ruth. I can't readily pick out a favorite of yours, either, but this one would be right up there for sure. Hope you're doing well..........  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*BOWING BEFORE THE QUEEN* WOW WOW WOW HOOT-GIRL THIS IS AMAZING!! thank you for reposting this jewel for those of us who had not had the pleasure what an awesome poem and not just because of the style of writing but for the content and message. superb my dear... wny I do believe you've earned SECONDS ON OATMEAL!!! LOL later-hoot-gator jm |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW!! I'm at a loss as to what to say to this overwhelming response to this piece...thank you each and every one of you although thanks seems so little to say Melissa...a special thanks to you for your kind words JM...you and that oatmeal Thanks |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Enjoyed your poem!!!!!!! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is a truly wonderful poem, Hoot!! I am so glad you found your wings and flew on to better things. You deserve the best. This poem is becoming one of my favorites now...it is so touching and speaks volumes of wisdom. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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