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Just To Spend One Moment (Sven's Challenge)
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Just To Spend One Moment (Sven's Challenge) |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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How's this Sir Sven? Only a sunset can equal the beauty of that which I see in your eyes An ocean of water could never quench this thirst I feel for you Whenever you're near my heart skips a beat As the tension grows The touch of your silken fingers sets my body to shiver The mere thought of my name upon your breath is enough to make me sigh I would give up the rest of my life just to spend one moment in your arms All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
why do you guys keep asking Sven how it is-- LOL ASK US FAIR MAIDENS HOW IT IS... (unless of course your writing it Sven)LOL then by all means-dont let me interrupt  looooove those silken fingers making things quiver jeff-gator... very nice....very  keep those romantic poems coming gentleman. jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Nicely done Jeffrey... seems we've got the fair maidens swooning all over the place! Eric. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lord Jeffrey~ I need a glass of water after reading this one. All of a sudden I'm quite thirsty lol. This was very romantic and I would say definitely met Sven's challenge. Ladies I'm enjoying this...hope the rest of you are as well. take care  amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jan, First let me say, don't make me puke...lol secondly, thanks for the sweet reply Eric, that was the point right? Amy, I got kinda thirsty as I was writing it also lolthanx for the kind words All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hmmmmmm Jeffery, you have turned it on, my friend... Good work, Regards, sudhir. My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
JC---the sweetness of your spirit shone with this---and left me feeling a bit---predatory? |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Works for me...and well too I might add |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Romance is in the words, penned by poets. Well done! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Jeff that was wonderful. very romantic. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Jeffrey, Oh to have someone say this to me! Good job Romeo. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, Sigh....what every woman wants. Beautiful sentiments my friend!! I love this one!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Swooning my heart is beating to thy words, words that only a true knight of romance could pen, just the poem to win, the hearts of many a fair maiden Me loved it! |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Whoooooo Jeffrey ------that lucky lady! Wonderfully done! ~netswan |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sir Jeffrey has the right of it sweet romantic verse he wrote but I shall sit and bide my time until I cast my vote! Very good, Jeffrey! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I declare this WONDERFUL! ~Heather |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"The mere thought of my name upon your breathe is enough to make me sigh." You have stirred me up with this line. I love to have a woman say my name...and if she says my name while she is kissing me....James |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Jeffrey: Count me in the swooning category. You're right up there with Elvis and Ben & Jerry's Ice Cream! A great piece. |
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