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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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She fills my every waking moment And my every evening dream She heals my life's torment And calms my heart's scream Though I have not seen her face Her heart takes me to a place That exists only in my mind A place that I have longed to find She is my Lady, sweet Romance And in her gentle glance Those eyes of Caribbean blue The man that I can be comes into her gentle view. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Make me melt like ice-cream. Me Sveet, sensitive, Sven...totally lovely... |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Sven, You are quite the romatic!! Wonderful and sweet, melts butter! ...who ever she is....it's her loss. Just beautiful. marcy |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
She is my Lady, sweet Romance And in her gentle glance Those eyes of Caribbean blue The man that I can be comes into her gentle view. . . a wonderful poem, lovely and romantic. Though I have not seen her face Her heart takes me to a place That exists only in my mind A place that I have longed to find I believe that dream will become a reality, it warms the lonely nights yet I know that one day I can share those lonely nights with some one. excellent poem. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I think read this a little different then Marcy. I think she is a very lucky! Your romantic writing never ceases to amaze me. A challenge very well met! Now I have to compare to all the others of course before this fair maiden can make her choose. So many wonferful pieces to choose from you know....LOL  I will have to get back to you! Marina |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Oh Sven, I love this !! I would like to make a suggestion...but that is so hard when you didn't ask for a critique. *MB zipping lip.*  MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, I love you! Your Lady June*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such romance pours from your golden pen ... well done Sven! Best wishes, /Kit |
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nando Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden |
Sven you romantic little devil... Loved it, creates an atmosphere of looooooove, sweeet love... I salute thee... -nando- Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday... |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
How very lovely and romantic! I loved it!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
How beautiful Sven, you words are always a caress to the one you love, so moving, such a tribute... You love making all the female hearts flutter don't you? I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sven .. eyes of carribean blue ... this verse is so sweet Once again you've captured the essence of romance and love so genuine  Coco |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
wonderful writing Sven, you show your romantic side well here. Parker |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all for your wonderful comments. . . Magnolia, you had a suggestion?? I'm all ears. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Well Sven, I have seen your pic...you can't be all ears. Though I have not seen her face Her heart takes me to a place That exists only in my mind A place that I have longed to find Changed to this below*still your words* it matches the rhyme sequence of the beginning four lines of your poem. Though I have not seen her face That exists only in my mind Her heart takes me to a place A place that I have longed to find Ok Ok I will zip the lip again and take 40 lashes with a wet noodle. Sorry! I still love your poem! MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, I love you! Your Lady June*~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*sigh* to be loved like that is a dream! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh Sven how dreamy and romantic very beautiful indeed sweet man of romance. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"And in her gentle glance Those eyes of Caribbean blue the man that I can be comes into her gentle view." This poem is so gentle and romantic. You have really shown us the softness of your heart and a look inside a womans heart. James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all again. . . And Magnolia, thanks for your suggestion. . . always willing to get any help that I can. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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