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Unreachable Touch
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Unreachable Touch |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Unreachable Touch Unnattainable relation. Unreachable touch. Too much has been lost... atleast I know this much. Too much time has gone on by, too many things you've missed, too many smiles you didn't see, and bruises you failed to kiss. The effect of you is everlasting, the pain you caused is strong. Taken all the hope we had then told us we were wrong. The horrific displays of anger, still burning in my heart, still tearing up my insides, so wrong of you from the start. The fear you instilled still lingers, the cloud in my sky still there, the foreverness of all you've done, still burning over here. Unreachable touch. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
This poem has so much raw emotion! Beautifully written and very expressive. A very angry retort. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ I found this to be a well written piece from a heart that certainly has felt pain. I felt tender touching from a bruised heart. No anger seen here by me ... just painful memories. I hope you reach beyond the pain and find happiness. *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
It doesnt sound like this touch is still unreachable.. I loved the depth of this piece. It is soooooo pretty. I dont like many pieces like this but this piece was definetely the exception... Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow SpitFire! This is indeed a very powerful piece, charged with much emotion and pain. I hope that the pain will ease for you, Take Care! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is a great piece as I could feel your pain pouring from out this poem. Great job! Nathan |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i know these feelings so well! you've got a good theme, the unattainable craving, and it's well expressed. very raw and real. i dig it. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
love and hate, passion and dispassion, life and death, all mixed feelings,full of flow straight from your heart. Sincerely A_L |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
SpitFire~ I am really enjoying watching the different styles of writing you can display. This one here is a gem. It has a lot of in depth emotions entwined into one powerful intense piece! It is apparent to the reader that this comes from a deep place of strong feelings. You write them out exceptionally well. A shadow of sadness lingers in this but also anger. Good poem, very good my friend. take care, amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Powerful piece Spitfire and filled with so much pain. A great poem! Take care. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~RSEvans,...thank you for reading...and replying with such kindness. Take care. ~Marge,...aww thanks for the hugs and for reading. Oh, and for the hoping. Thank you. ~Cuddlez,...an exception???...well thank you dear. ...for liking...and reading.~EagleOne,...Thank you for the hoping and for reading and replying....really...thanks. ~Nate Dogg,...Why thank you....for reading and for feeling it. Take care. ~Ethan_Halo,...thank you for taking the time. Sorry though that you know these feelings. Ouch. Thanks for diggin'. ~Amazon_Lover,...thank you, thank you for your reply...it all fell out....of my heart...as you said. ~Aimster,...oh thank you. Thank you so much for your in-depth reply. And your kind and encouraging words. ~Dark Angel,...thank you for the reading.  and for the powerful...very cool. Take care.*Peace. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Spit Fire, Powerful words from your wounded heart my friend. I hope that you find comfort for your pain...soon. You deserve to be happy. Well written! HUGS, LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I really enjoyed reading this poem because there was SO much intense emotion in it! You did an excellent job portraying exactly what you were feeling. Great work! "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
SpitFire, You did a superb job expressing feelings. Very powerful emotions expressed. Good job. marcy |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
WOW!! This is an excellent piece! Loved it. Love your poems. Love to *sk8. |
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