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Love's Champion. (On guard Sir Sven!)
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Love's Champion. (On guard Sir Sven!) |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England 
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Well, having thought long and hard about this, I have decided to reply to Sven's challenge with a repost of one of my favourite poems, Love's Champion. I originally posted it under another name, but as it is so appropriate, just couldn't resist  Anyway, without further ado....Love's Champion. Snorting stamping straining eager for battle dappled, mail clad, charger thunders into view in clouds of billowing steam spurred on by master's passion rearing turning awaiting battle. He pauses grudgingly tense from rider's fire shaking snowy head awaiting battle. Sir Knight suited in plates of steel cloaked in whitest silk surcoat holding ivory shield, emblazoned with gilt wings of an Angel dips his lance to flame haired princess receiving her token freely given then smiles as he spurs his mount onwards awaiting battle. Black Knave armored in trickery shielded by cunning words rides slowly forward awaiting battle? The Champion chuckling softly turns his back disdainfully returning to his love's side and says softly, "MY Lady I need not soil my lance with his foul blood for the battle for thy heart was won long ago. But know thee now shouldst need arise I, servant and champion am here awaiting battle." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ahhh, you've met this challenge with a twist Eric! Well done ... no need to fight it out then? Beautifully written and picturesque, I could feel the hooves prancing about and see the suitor's sly smile! Terrific poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Nice writing Eric. You respond to a challenge like a true champion. ~~well done~~ A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Eric, whomever this was written to must realize how much you love her! This was a passionate, beautiful piece that is really well written to boot. If the other men in Passions even meet this poem halfway this joust should prove to be VERY interesting. All in all you have my vote for the most romantic poem. This fair lady bows to the Champion of the Flame Haired Lass... H |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great setting! Scenes from Camelot! Wise knight that he was he knew where his heart was. Good writing. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Eric, TOUCHE!!! Well done brave Knight! You have met the challenge right! Now, just sit back and see If another takes after thee!! Well done my friend. . . Gentlemen, three posts now. . . where are yours??? We await them!!! --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Eric, surely you joust!...er, don't joust? Either way this is an excellent piece of writing. Well done! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*sigh*...but for the love of Knight....very good.. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
well done thy knight of bravery, such romantic words thy hand has written, Enough to make a maiden smitten, returning to his love's sideand says softly, "MY Lady I need not soil my lance with his foul blood for the battle for thy heart was won long ago. But know thee now shouldst need arise I, servant and champion am here awaiting battle." |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh dear, Eric. this is a lovely poem. But I want blood -- I am a passionate woman. LOL j/k this is great. And, am always happy to see a man who knows he does not have to prove himself --) ~netswan |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Thankyou all for your kind replies... you've made my day already and it's only just started Kit, I'm glad you could really feel this one. I couldn't have done it without Dobbin Danny, thankyou... but all I do is serve My Lady Heather, believe me, she knows *bowing with a flourish*Ethome, I've always enjoyed books about King Arthur and his knights so it was a pleasure writing in that style. I'm glad you feel I've done it justice Sven, a rough pat on the back and a tankard of ale for you. Thankyou for giving me the chance to repost this Even now my squire is polishing my thinking cap for round two of the joust.'Deer... did you REALLY say excellent about my writing? Praise indeed Sharon, I'm glad it made you *sigh*. When my poetry makes someone feel then I know I've done my job And Romantic Heart, it's hard making up 8 original thankyous all in one go, so just... thankyou  And so, with bows to the ladies and a hearty grin for the gents, this knight rides off to another field. Thankyou ALL Eric. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
And Netswan, sneaking in there while I'm writing my thankyous... a big thankyou to you too. Maybe you'll get some gore if this goes to round two? *bloodthirsty grin* Eric. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Then there's me skulking about - but you already know that I love this one...  |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Eric~ Well done dear Sir, challenge well met. This was excellent, imagery perfect Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Wow, a delightful read this was, and a challenge well met. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Nan, yes, I do already know you love this one but it's still encouraging to see it. Thankyou! Tracie, I'm glad you liked the imagery... I spent AGES looking for the right words to use And Dreamer, if you can find delight in poetry then you can't be truly Lost. Thanks all, Eric |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Eric~ this was VERY romantic! i enjoyed this one immensly. right now its a tie for me between you and Jeffrey lol. Keep them coming gentlemen. Looking foward to this summer for sure  amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Beautifully done Eric. A classy poem with lots of vivid images, set of certain tell-tale signs... Regards, sudhir My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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Menage Numero Trois Junior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 33Zee South of France |
Ahhh thees has delight me much! I vould like for zee to bee my Knight. You write weeth such passion and oh vaat eez thee american word...ahhh such description terms! Theees has my vote *kisses* ~Trois vous avez les bras d'un boeuf, de l'esprit d'un poèt, et du coeur d'un lion Je vous adore |
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Maya the Brokenhearted Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 66 |
Ohhh this is lovely Eric! She must be pretty special Congrats on a triumphant poem! Maya |
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Princess Buttercup New Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 2 |
Oh my! I was looking for Wesley and just stumbled in here.....awesome poem Sir Knight! If anyone sees Wesley (or the Dread Pirate Roberts) would you please let him know that Princess Buttercup awaits him in her chambers! PB |
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Justin Conceivable Junior Member
since 1999-10-16
Posts 16 |
Well well well what do we have here? I think I arrived Justin Thyme! Merriment and happiness that is not stute related? I may have to call the other stute members in on this one! Great *stab* at the challenge, Sir Eric! Watch out tho that knave may jab ya in the back. JC |
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Rose Red Junior Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 10scotland |
OOPS double post, sorrrrrrrrrrry  [This message has been edited by Rose Red (edited 06-09-2000).] |
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Rose Red Junior Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 10scotland |
WOW! I love medieval things, poetry, whatever! WOWOWOW! Wonderful poem Eric! Rose |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Simply wonderful......and her I sit and wish I could have done so well...... It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Wow, this humble knight is most honoured to receive so great a response to his meagre offering! (and now he has to think up even more original thankyous )Aimster, I'm glad you liked it. Could it be Jeffrey and I slogging it out to the bitter end? We shall see! Sudhir, I know what you're trying to do.... all these compliments and my helmet won't fit my head any more, giving you an easy victory! Thankyou Menage Numero Trois, keep those kisses coming, I like em! Maya, she is! Buttercup, I have a little secret for you.... when I retired from being the Dread Pirate Roberts, I traded in my eyepatch for this rather fetching suit of armour! Justin, thankyou for your kind words though I feel it's only fair to warn you that I've reported your escape to Doc Moose. Rose Red, I don't think my poetry has rated a triple WOW before, thankyou Maybe because I live in Cornwall some of the magic of Camelot has leaked into me?First_Knight, fight nobly and true and you will have done well indeed! Thanks for replying And now, this night bids you all goodknight (or something )Eric. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I am perusing the archives this lovely rainy morning and wated to bump yer lil joust poem right back up to the top where people can't forget about it ~Heather PS I still like it lots! |
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