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If You Should Wander Forth
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If You Should Wander Forth |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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If You Should Wander forth If you should ever wander forth Beyond the garden’s edge And leave this place of bounty love Where we have laid our heads Then I shall never wish to breathe The perfume of a rose Nor gather blossoms for my eyes Nor worship joy’s repose For life would vanish if you left This nest of Eden home This space profuse with radiant hues Below God’s azure dome Without your love, I’d never more Recline in petal's soft To study midnight canopies Of planets posed aloft If you should disappear one day Beyond the primrose hedge For want of just one wishful step Outside the garden’s edge I’d never care to turn an ear To warbler’s lullaby Nor would I raise my eyes again To wonders of the sky I’d never visit with a star Except to ask it why Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 06-07-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Elizabeth ... absolutely lovely ... twinning again me thinks, for you've touched my heart deeply with this one. Best wishes dear heart, /Kit |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely lovely, Elizabeth! Now that's love!  Denise |
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angelsamongus Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 70New York |
Elizabeth, This poem is so full of love, it is very beautiful. Thank You for sharing. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ Without your love, I’d never more Recline in petals soft To study midnight’s canopy Of planets posed aloft ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ ~Lori |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Elizabeth, I loved the flow in this work. The imagery was wonderful alos as was the thought so eloquently put forth of possible lost love. Very nice work. David2 |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Oh, Liz, This is positively exquisite! I know love like this and it is God's greatest gift. So your poem touches me in a very special way too. Thank you sweet and gifted poetess. Love, Ellie 02 |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, dear Elizabeth~ Talk about a romantic tale. My, my .... this is so lovely 'Beyond the primrose hedge' how inspiring ! Check your e-mail, sweet friend. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Liz* This is wonderful....you weave such beautiful tales. Your talent is a gift that you seflessly share with all of us, we are very lucky Thank you!! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I am in awe of your talent Elizabeth God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--this is so lovely...the imagery exquisite! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all for your kind comments. I think the rose arbor at my fron door is inspiring my poetry these days. I don't know what I'll do when those petals fall Liz |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Devine.....this is. Simply Devine!!! It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Elizabeth~ This was written from deep within your beautiful heart and soul. A tender, loving piece. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
First Knight, Your "Devine" warms my heart. You've given the most wonderful compliment in one word Thank you Tracee, Somehow you seem to give a self portrait within you comments. Thank you, dear Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Roll, Roll, Roll, lady, you are on a roll, alright! Amazed by your subtlety in poetry, Dazzled by the luminousity of the light that you shed through your poetry divine, I watch these lines, stupefied, numbed, scratching my head, what I am doing here??? and I thought I could write.... Regards to you Liz, Great work, Sudhir. Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir, I am so humbled by a writer such as you offering such praise. I don't know what to say except that these words were not composed by me but were written by God and happen to come out my pen.I know you know what I mean, because you often write the same way. Thank you, dear poet for your comments. Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Elizabeth, I'm in awe of your talent. This is absolutley beautiful. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
this should be permanantly fixated atop the forum so all that venture in and out can see it, beautiful no other word for it |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dark Angel Thank you, dear Kevin, What a lovely comment. Thanks so much Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If you should ever wander forth Beyond the garden’s edge And leave this place of bounty love Where we have laid our heads Then I shall never wish to breathe The perfume of a rose Nor gather blossoms for my eyes Nor worship joy’s repose ------------- Nor would I raise my eyes again To wonders of the sky I’d never visit with a star Except to ask it why ------------- Liz, this poem takes my breath away... it is SO BEAUTIFUL and PERFECT... it is exquisite in its grace of emotions this is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read... the emotions of those last lines are simply enchanting. thank you for this lovely gift you share with us. jm |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz - this poem reflects the beauty in you so very well. Everything you write seems... right. Its getting to where I can't comment on anything you put to pen without sounding repetitious - Do you see all the trouble you're causing me??? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Should the rose petals outside your door fade and fall to earthen floor never fear. For the passing of the rose is God's choosing and He chose, so never fear. For love and rose will bloom forth again which gives reason and verse to your pen. So never fear. ~~~~~~~~ Small, albeit heartfelt tribute to what you do so beautifully, Elizabeth. Thank you. Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Sunshine - that was beautiful |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Janet Marie, Your exuberance lights my day, the way you respond to everyone's poetry, and I thank you for taking time and comment on this poem LngJhn, You honor me with your remarks. I'm glad you liked this poem. Thanks Sunshine, What a beautiful poem you write! Thank you so much. You are so sweet Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow! Awash in tears from your sweet, tortuous words...Definitely one of your best, Liz! Corinne |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Corinne, If you liked it, I am so pleased. Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Liz |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Elizabeth~ Totally tender and beautiful!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lorraine, Thanks for reading my verses and for Your lovely comments. It is much appreciated Liz |
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