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the eye of the needle
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the eye of the needle |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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the eye of the needle I pull words from somewhere and from that same somewhere deep within something pushes them seeking recognition threading words through the tiny opening that refuses closure stringing them out piling them into poems begging gasping for understanding I pull they push I collect words gather the strings I need gather I must for stop they don’t and go back inside they won’t and see I cannot the aching place from whence they come and lest it overfill and explode stand I with pockets stuffed picking poems and no where to put one more single word but the ache stills not pushes its words some sense to make it cries out for me to stop the insanity the words the ache |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Holy Moly,...this here is so powerfully written. I love it. I like the freestyle...I like the emotion...the expression. Well done. Thank you. The concept used is great...Take care. *Peace. |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi I'm beginning to see the profoundity in poem and I liked it. Thanks for the read. Great poem. Sincerely A_L |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
POWERFUL is the singular word to describe this one! I try hard, they swirl, increase force, to no avail, force from within, inner strength, threaded corners, don't let go, words that I want to place, in trajected lines, dejected soul, painful cries, slam dunk push pull, slap on face by fate... sorry for all that, but a powerful piece like this makes me flip off... hope you did not mind the intruding thoughts.... regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-06-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
spitfire thank you...I never know how my poems will read until I see them reflected int the readers words...  amazonLover, glad you liked sudhir, thank you sir, and no...how could I mind an exclamation point to my poem? loved your spontaneous combustion....very powerful in itself! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
great job corazon try to get this word into that needle...supercalifradgilisticexpealidocious (sp?) |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Corazon, This poem, had to click onto it when I saw the title. Wow, this is too much, for I just started doing a study of "the eye of the needle", from the Bible. When I saw your title and read your message, I was in awe for what you said in verse. When I finish my study, if you like, I will email you my thoughts. Thanks for this one. Marcy |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
walt.....ok here goes....you push and I will pull thanks for the readalle...thank you much, glad you enjoyed, and yes would like very much for you to mail me your thoughts |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corazon, I have to echo the above wow's.... You and Doreen should team up for a poem. Lately I've noticed your styles just plow through and bam I'm exhausted, but satisfied... Parker |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
parker, well can't say that leaving a man exhausted but satisfied is something I am against  thanks |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Sweetheart: Just keep your eyes on the cotton, cause when the thread won't go through the needle, maybe the needle is blunt.... LOL at exhausted, give me one of those table tennis balls on elastic or maybe a yoyo... HUSG |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks rg...I know...in other words keep trying its got to get better huh? having good friends helps thanks lady |
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