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This Slivered Moon
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This Slivered Moon |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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This Slivered Moon I could see the slivered moon in the western sky resplendent and in the shadow thus displayed reverence spoke as purple iris knelt together petals folded and behind them in the bower sunflowers bowed like dolls with yellow hair tired from sunlight’s hold on watching. And then the magic evening breezes touched the sage and released such magic frog voices spilled from off the mountains across the canyon’s echoed chamber and stillness folded in my vision and brought me too complete delighting quenched the hunger of my spirit touched my moonlit face beguiling. Oh slivered moon with shadowed light dream me perfect in your drenching breeze this spirit with this loving touch of magic moving heaven beguile my skin to soft with light engorge my sleep with fragrant dream keep me in your quiet watch as day succumbs to nighttime’s peace. < !signature--> In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-05-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Oh, my ! How absolutely beautiful ... and my favorite subject !  You are the best ! Unequivocally ... the best ! 'frog voices spilled from off the mountains across the canyon’s echoed chamber and stillness folded in my vision and brought me too complete delighting' And you, dear poetess ... have brought me to complete delighting ! God, this is beautiful .... I effuse, I know .... but oh, my ! 'sunflowers bowed like dolls with yellow hair tired from sunlight’s hold on watching' If I don't stop now ... I'll end up copying the entire poem ! ! It's printing now ... and tomorrow it goes in a frame for my office. Beautiful, Martie. Love you ... and thank you for this gift. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Martie, What an absolutely beautiful picture you have painted!!! Thank you for sharing it. Just lovely. I hope that you have very sweet dreams, my friend. Fabulous writing! Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Another classic, Martie! So beautiful, truly! Corinne |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is ridiculous. NO ONE continually writes this good! You have a team of writers living in your house...don't lie to me! This is precious... the moon and you...two heavenly bodies...the perfect combination. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
This is absolutely enchanting, Martie! I am totally in love with this....especially the last verse. Pure magic. *Krista Knutson* "Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~ |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Wow this is beautiful! Your metaphors are quite amazing and the imagery is astounding! *Applauds* Abrahm Simons "In a moment lies eternity And in a kiss resides forever" - Krista Knutson my bestest friend! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Martie... you have graced us with a slice of slendor. I have reread three times now and am still in awe. What an absolutely beautiful poem. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
where do you live my dear poet... cause I need to come and look out your window my view here is missing something... oh i know-- YOUR poetic vision...*smile* *sigh* ok me and my poet envy will go to bed now sweet dreams martie-gator  jm btw...did i mention this poem was exquisite.. and perfect... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Poetic Perfection Plus all those things Marge said You truly are the best, my dear You left me with wondrous visions, the moon from your eyes is a moon that no one else sees, and then you write it Love liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh MArtie, Beautiful, beautiful! and this... Oh slivered moon with shadowed light dream me perfect in your drenching breeze this spirit with this loving touch of magic moving heaven beguile my skin to soft with light engorge my sleep with fragrant dream keep me in your quiet watch as day succumbs to nighttime’s peace. *sighhhh* Keep them coming!! Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Simply beautiful Martie ... I echo all above comments ... lovely verse! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sorry, but the slivered moon isn't sinking just yet, so I'm putting it high in yhe sky Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh, this is lovely...shine on |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Martie this is absoulutely beautiful! Such a lovely picture you have created! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you so much all you loved and lovely poets for such wonderful comments about this poem. Marge, thank you dear for sending me a printable version and for hanging it on your wall..how very special, and Liz for replying twice...wow! What a great start to a new day! |
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Wicked Witch of the East Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 69 |
'Tis a beautiful poem you've written here that deserves a bump back up to the top. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Another day's gone by And the slivered moon rises high in the sky once more So that all the world may come know the wonders of a slivered moon through Martie's eyes. And that is truly a wonder to behold Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey witchy--you're not so wicked after all...thanks for the bump. Liz--I'm so glad that you like this poem...no one ever replied three times before...thanks sweet lady! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I am new here at this forum but I have to say that when it comes to honest heartfelt poetry that this is down to earth and beautiful. No self righteous display of incongruous vocabulary, just very tastefully done. |
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