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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA 
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Lost and alone I silently shout Searching all over but no one's about A landscape so black that I cannot see I believe I may wander throughout eternity Bleak and barren with no sign of hope Not sure how long I'll be able to cope I can't help but think that nobody cares I'm stuck in this place with naught by my fears A wall on my left and one to my right A tumble of rocks in the darkness of night I trudge on through this infernal maze Don't know where I am, just lost in the haze Without meaning or purpose walls have been built The ground is a mixture of ashes and silt Finally a door, so I enter the room Silent and empty and cold as a tomb I sit to reflect and tears fill my eyes A gut-wrenching sob as I realize This hopelessly empty, barren, black hole This landscape I'm in, my very own soul... Steven Seaman To thine own self be true... |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oooo...kinda sent chills down my spine there. I loved how desciptive it was! Nice work! "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi SOK, It's a bad situation. I feel exactly the same way empty walls and minds moving around,life is a misery . Just live untl you find better times. Sincerely A_L |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sea, What powerful writing and images you conjure up in your poem. Wow....fabulous writing. I hope you realize that you are never truly alone. You may be surprised at just how many people care about you. Hang in there...there will be sunshine one day.  Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
dark and powerful imagery here Sea, both visual and emotional excellent rhyme flow as well liked the landscape metaphor too you have expressed these emotions painfully well. we do build up walls of protection around us when we've been hurt. hopefuly we heal in time and dont linger too long in the isolation I believe our writing helps us to heal. take care, jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi Sea Isolation is what we've created in ourself. World is beautiful around us and enjoy it. Step up out of your prison and reach with your soul to heavens above. Sincerely A_L |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hey sea!!! wavin at sea..long time no sea..hehe anyways very good poem as usual sea when sea cries its a salty sea o man i better stop it sea yeah sea what are yuh a copper sea yeah yeah |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Hey Sea of OKC....this one is quite chilling to say the least. You painted some powerful dark imagery there. I could see you in that tomb man... I love how you wrapped this thing up at the end too. You certainly have a way with words from within. Keep writing, if you're really needing to vent. Soooo glad to see you back. Have I told you that enough yet??  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sea, this was quite powerful, and very lonely...vivid imagery...well done! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sea~ this one just SCREAMED out to me and i had to read it twice. wow! such vivid imagery and intense emotion you have woven into this one. if this is "real life" i hope you know you are not alone. and if it isn't well you convey the message and feelings extremely well. at any rate awesome piece of poetry. take care and best wishes. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Thank you all for your comments and support I guess we all write from our experiences but before you worry too much about me be assured I have already been thru the darkness and emerged on the other side, just did not write about it until now. There were a series of 'endings' in my life recently but now I am looking forward to new beginnings.Femme - you can never tell me enough Walt - very nice to see you again too |
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