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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Songbird Bring back the harmony of my universe, my song my dawn, for I have no place to melt the violins and flutes of my soul play the melodies and my heart the severe stroke of a drum my head, heavy with chorus sings and shouts "about the way things are, how they've been and how they'll be" my voice a cry of birds, will call for you …. the songbird, of my heart dark angel 4/6/00 < !signature--> Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-04-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Bring back the harmony of my universe, my song my dawn, for I have no place to melt well I am tone deaf, and can't play a musical instrument so I guess my life song would be a life poem. A lovely poem, remember to sing everyday. "Thinking, long ago when we were young and free Love happened easily And dreams never died, life sung a pretty song" Chanson D'amour ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ There is a light shining in your poetry. This is wonderfully written. What beauty in this verse - 'Bring back the harmony of my universe, my song my dawn, for I have no place to melt' I so greatly enjoyed this one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I really love this poem for it's dark side and for the hope in it. Very well written and expressed, it is unique and emcompasses so much. Beautiful lines! You have successfully convinced the reader of the intense longing, a beautiful and bittersweet longing at that. Wow! I often feel like this. Excellent title and ending.  Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dark Angel--Your poetry is so uniquely you...so full of emotion expressed in just the right well-chosen words. Well done! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful poem. So rich with depth and longing.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Brian thanks so much, give me a song and I'll keep singing.  Marge, Thank you so very much for your sweet and lovely reply. glad you enjoyed it. Melissa, thank you for your kind reply and for taking the time for reading. Martie, thank you sweetie, your replies always mean so much. thanks Sharon, thank you I always do appreciate your replies. Thank you . Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Breath-taking! You have such a way with words. You are able to take the reader with you wherever your mind wanders and it's a fascinating journey! "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Dark Angel, I really enjoyed this one. Well done! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~The songbird of my heart....I loved this. Such an emotion packed piece...a great expression. Take care. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Gorgeous, Dark Angel. You have remarkable talent. *Krista Knutson* "Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! This is just fabulous, thank you for sharing. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
TA, thank you! so glad you enjoyed the journey. Lorraiine, thank you so much Spitfire Thank you. Alwye, Wow! talent? I don't know, but I do appreciate your lovely compliment. Thank you.Eagle, you welcome... glad you liked. Thank you. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I agree with Krista! YES! You do have talent! You have that unique way of putting words that says so much...you leave one speechless. I need my dictionary to find new words to express how FANTASTIC your writing is. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I LOVE IT!!!!! Need I say more ? |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Very nice again M .... "BRAVA" ... lol.....did i get it right?? MP |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Angel, wow Thank you hon I'm speechless too! about your reply and everyone elses.Ruth, no need to say more, as long as you love it! Thanks hon for taking the time to read and comment. MP,dear friend..Thank you for your lovely reply and yes YAY! you got it right babyyy. *hugs* Thanks again. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DA, Keep that beautiful song in your heart, my friend. Excellent writing!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
4 beats to a measure your song is a treasure. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie Of course, that is your opinion Nevertheless I thank you. Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-06-2001).] |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Lovely. Enjoyed, thanks! |
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