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The First Poem (the challenge)
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The First Poem (the challenge) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The first line of a poem I wrote Was “To be or not to be” What’s that you say, Shakespeare wrote that? Well, I really thought it was me! Perhaps this line was my first “She was a Phantom of delight!” William Wordsworth wrote that line!? Are you sure that you are right? I must have written down that verse My first, my premiere line Those lines are great, perfect words Could only come from deVine! “Gaily bedight, a gallant knight” The first line of my poem “Eldorado” Oh, are you sure it was penned By Edgar Allan Poe? What was the line I wrote In the first poem I ever created Thrown out because I was sure When read, it would be hated. I think back to that innocent time To the year when I was eight No words are in that memory They are lost by an act of fate. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ah, that's a shame.  This is very clever, Sharon, I love it!Denise |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
"The caring prayers, the shaking shock" was my first line, and it better not be (supposedly) someone else's!  Too bad you don't have your first poem, PdV, we're missing out on something!Elizabeth And this I say to you: why? Why? Just tell me why, so I can understand. Why? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you! I have been reading everyone's first poem and decided to write this. I didn't start writing poetry seriously until I was 35! I do have my first, but it's not suitable for this forum!  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This was great deVine. . .I knew that you were behind these somehow!! And I want to know. . . what forum IS your first poem suitable for???  -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
Totally endearing. The tender age of 8...innocence before it crosses that final threshold. |
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Jester59701 Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 154 |
Excellent as usual PdV! I love the way your mind works! (Gratuitous mentorated pratronizations aside) Jester ':~) |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Enjoyed this very much PDV as always. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Cute Sharon -- Wow, such talent and didn't start writing til you were 35. Well, I, for one am sure glad you started ~netswan |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I used to get a lot of my best images from different poems or even songs. Anyway a clever poem, lovely enjoyed the read. I think back to that innocent time To the year when I was eight No words are in that memory They are lost by an act of fate. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful response in the spirit of "the first poem" Poet deVine! I'm so glad you picked up the pen at 35 ... this was terrific! Best wishes, /Kit |
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