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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2000-04-20 02:41 AM


Poison, sweet,
flows in vein
swore
I'd not
go there again...
sorrows' cries
mortal sighs
all weakness left
but to explain
on the morrow
submerged portal
murky depth
still to explain.

Wantoness
Indignity
Ruthlessly
brought to my knees
haunted
words write poetry
tears of gods
fill salty sea
to wonder
what's to come
of me...
I beg
you pray
serenity.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-04-20 02:50 AM


Wow!

netswan

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-04-20 08:32 AM


you beg divinely my sweet...
this is EXCELLENT girl!!
love the rhyme flow and pace...
you and your muse have been cranking out
the poems ... and kicking some butt too (SMILE)
very nice work here sweet serenity
kiss kiss
jm

 Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders
And it makes me want to touch you there.
And the light in your eyes makes me feel
Like there's something much better out there
Something kind...
And I know someday I might be looking around
Trying to find some purpose
Well purpose it can't be that hard to find
As long as I've got the wind...
The wind and your love to carry me.
vertical horizon



Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 2000-04-20 08:39 AM


The pain in this flows into it's own salty sea of tears.  Achingly exquisite, serenity.


Michael

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
4 posted 2000-04-20 09:51 AM


OK ... who threw sand in my eye ?
WOW

Rex}>{{{{o>

PeterPeter
Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 30
British, London
5 posted 2000-04-20 10:20 AM


Serenity Indeed,

I like it, but? wait your reply
PeterPeter

devina
Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
6 posted 2000-04-20 11:24 AM


You've been painfully thourough with this one love...my turn to blow my nose on my sleeve? Big hugs sis...

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-04-20 12:09 PM


netswan & Rex Allen---I stand "wowed" by your
         "wows"--(I really, really, LIKE that
         word!)  Thank you.

Michael--thank you my friend and beloved
         saint.  Me humble.

Janet Marie--thanks m'twin, the 'feeler of
         my pain...'kiss kiss back atchya.

Devina--M'sis--financial tip for all--buy
        stock in tissues--(This "sleeve"
        thing is getting gross..." ) Hugs.

PeterPeter--not sure what the question was...
        The poem?  I don't like to explain
        too much..suffice to say that I read
        alot of mythology, and have an
        obsession with Jungian archetype.
        Hope that helps.--if it's my pen
        name that has you confused--take a
        number...lol.  No, Serenity is not
        a description...I took my name from
        the timeless "Serenity Prayer..."
        I'd say it was my favorite prayer--
        but I must confess that my favorite
        is whichever prayer has been most
        recently answered to my favor...

Thanks to all--now back to the show...

bsquirrel
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

8 posted 2000-04-22 09:19 PM


Another poisoned kiss. Sweet!

Mike

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

9 posted 2000-04-22 09:20 PM


beautifully haunting

 Kathleen


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