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CocoBaci
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0 posted 2000-05-30 01:23 AM


~ Seven Itch ~
Silent at night she peaks through ivory blinds
   Wondering when he'll be coming home tonight
Dawn quickly approaching her sleep now disturbed
   Sounds of door opening and tip-toeing are heard
Entering the room he stumbles to the sheets
   Quickly she rises and questions him
He carefully exits the bed and walks away
   Shaking his head not even a word does he say
The day has come the two must face
   Reality of how things have changed
Following him from room to room
   Her tears fall from her cheeks unto the floor
Words left unspoken only her heartache can be seen
   Suitcase in tow and doorknob in hand
Twist of the wrist and off he went
   Searching for something he doesn't even know
The seven year itch is what she's been told.

Coco Baci  

  


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eMoTiOnS oVerLoAd
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1 posted 2000-05-30 03:13 AM


I loved it!...but...the seven year itch? help me out i dont understand...lol
tracie66
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2 posted 2000-05-30 03:33 AM


Coco~
Thank god my husband and I are past the seven year itch...Phew got through that year without too much trouble but for some not so lucky and seperation is the only way.
You have written this well, I enjoyed the read.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



CocoBaci
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3 posted 2000-05-30 04:30 AM


Teehee  
I adore the comments you write!

Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-05-30 06:47 AM


You've expressed yourself well with heartfelt sadness Coco Baci.  You've touched me with your words, well done.

Best wishes for happiness,
/Kit

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5 posted 2000-05-30 07:13 AM


CocoBaci~
Well written ... there are some
who would help him pack !  
Meooooow !  
Nicely done, gal.
~*Marge*~



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devina
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6 posted 2000-05-30 10:48 AM


If he's itchin' dear- he doesn't deserve you in the first place!!! REMEMBER THAT!!! I'm with Marge on this one...HELP him pack honey!!! Great writing!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


CocoBaci
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7 posted 2000-05-30 01:45 PM


Kit, thank you for reading this lil twist of a verse it's always nice to have you visit me

Marge, I hear you gurl and I would agree .. suitcase should be handed to him.  One of these days I'll put to rhyme a sweet verse like 'Marge' those .. one of a kind's!

Devina, it's a treat to have you also pass thru the screen and take a peak at this lil verse that popped out from me.

    Coco




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Alle'cram
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8 posted 2000-05-30 11:02 PM


Very well done!  I think I know that lady and I believed she sprinkled his Fruit of the Looms with hot pepper before he left out the door. Then, when he starts itching, he may even think about her. {smile}(I'm with the rest of the ladies on this one.)
Great story.
Marcy

Lorraine Nisbet
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9 posted 2000-05-31 06:42 PM



Coco,

Loved the way this lil verse popped out from you.  Keep em popping.  Well done!

~Lorraine

 
A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


Lone Wolf
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10 posted 2000-05-31 06:48 PM


Coco,

I am with Marge here.....give him the suitcase and don't give him the satisfaction of seeing your tears.  He'll figure out what he's missing...you...but it will be too late.  You'll have found the kind of love you deserve.  Best wishes to you!!  Good writing and tough subject.

Lone Wolf


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Jana Tovey
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11 posted 2000-05-31 06:59 PM


Good writing.  I'm also with the ladies above...this is a sorry excuse (the 7 year itch), like it's inevitable.  I think a better excuse is inconstancy, or perhaps inconstancy and cowardice.    
CocoBaci
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12 posted 2000-06-01 02:20 AM


Alle, Lorrain, Wolfe   and Jana, thank you dearly for your supporting comments.
Twas a coincidence when this one popped out from my head.  
I jumped to the screen and jotted it down cus I felt strongly that it may be a topic worth a quick read.  
Anyways, I must it's been some time now and life is better every day!
Coco

[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 06-01-2000).]

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