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~ Seven Itch ~
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~ Seven Itch ~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
~ Seven Itch ~ Silent at night she peaks through ivory blinds Wondering when he'll be coming home tonight Dawn quickly approaching her sleep now disturbed Sounds of door opening and tip-toeing are heard Entering the room he stumbles to the sheets Quickly she rises and questions him He carefully exits the bed and walks away Shaking his head not even a word does he say The day has come the two must face Reality of how things have changed Following him from room to room Her tears fall from her cheeks unto the floor Words left unspoken only her heartache can be seen Suitcase in tow and doorknob in hand Twist of the wrist and off he went Searching for something he doesn't even know The seven year itch is what she's been told.  Coco Baci |
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eMoTiOnS oVerLoAd Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 10 |
I loved it!...but...the seven year itch? help me out i dont understand...lol |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Coco~ Thank god my husband and I are past the seven year itch...Phew got through that year without too much trouble but for some not so lucky and seperation is the only way. You have written this well, I enjoyed the read. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Teehee I adore the comments you write! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've expressed yourself well with heartfelt sadness Coco Baci. You've touched me with your words, well done. Best wishes for happiness, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CocoBaci~ Well written ... there are some who would help him pack ! Meooooow ! Nicely done, gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
If he's itchin' dear- he doesn't deserve you in the first place!!! REMEMBER THAT!!!  I'm with Marge on this one...HELP him pack honey!!! Great writing!!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kit, thank you for reading this lil twist of a verse it's always nice to have you visit me Marge, I hear you gurl and I would agree .. suitcase should be handed to him. One of these days I'll put to rhyme a sweet verse like 'Marge' those .. one of a kind's! Devina, it's a treat to have you also pass thru the screen and take a peak at this lil verse that popped out from me.  Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 05-30-2000).] |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Very well done! I think I know that lady and I believed she sprinkled his Fruit of the Looms with hot pepper before he left out the door. Then, when he starts itching, he may even think about her. {smile}(I'm with the rest of the ladies on this one.) Great story. Marcy |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Coco, Loved the way this lil verse popped out from you. Keep em popping. Well done! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Coco, I am with Marge here.....give him the suitcase and don't give him the satisfaction of seeing your tears. He'll figure out what he's missing...you...but it will be too late. You'll have found the kind of love you deserve. Best wishes to you!! Good writing and tough subject. Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
Good writing. I'm also with the ladies above...this is a sorry excuse (the 7 year itch), like it's inevitable. I think a better excuse is inconstancy, or perhaps inconstancy and cowardice. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Alle, Lorrain, Wolfe and Jana, thank you dearly for your supporting comments.Twas a coincidence when this one popped out from my head. I jumped to the screen and jotted it down cus I felt strongly that it may be a topic worth a quick read. Anyways, I must it's been some time now and life is better every day! Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 06-01-2000).] |
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