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Martie
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0 posted 2000-05-29 11:49 PM



Morning gathers in the curtain
to displays a crimson light
dazzled through the slant of shading
across a flash of keen insight.

Delivered in the softest rustle
elfin feet are softly going
with the moon's own fingers quieting
to the sun’s more open flowing.

Now departs delicious sweet dream
yet lingers still profound delight
lays me down against this lapping
quiet water’s weaving light.

Pewter tinted stars devoured
by the cream that slithers in
whispering open up with listening
hark the softly growing din.

Blaze this tree in sunlit splendor
trace the flowering petal near
now I feel night’s sweet surrender
to the sun shine’s clean and clear.

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 2000-05-29 11:53 PM


This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read in my life. Martie, you get better and better and I don't understand how that can be. This is probably my favorite of yours, or close to it.
I'm so glad I caught this before I went to bed
Excellent, girl!
Liz

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-05-30 12:09 PM


Delivered in the softest rustle
elfin feet are softly going
with the moon's own fingers quieting
to the sun’s more open flowing.

Now departs delicious sweet dream
yet lingers still profound delight
lays me down against this lapping
quiet water’s weaving light.

Pewter tinted stars devoured
by the cream that slithers in
whispering open up with listening
hark the softly growing din.
--------------
Liz is right---
there is a certain class of poet, whose gift is so rare and perfect...
that it gives them vision that the rest of us dont have...
you my dear are one of those gifted poets.
you can observe a moment in time,
that otherwise goes unoticed(or taken for granted)
and you weave into a tapestry of spun gold with your poets pen.
this poem proves my point completely.
the poem is breathtaking.
take care, jm



 Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme,
They are not measured by the commitment of time.
Some emotions run too deep to be described by words,
Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~



Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 2000-05-30 01:52 AM


Oh, Martie,  Your muse and mine seem to be mingling, intertwining - this poem of yours sends me wafting into a sweet spring breeze of memories, until I know I have to tell you - lovely and breathtaking, my friend!  Thank you for such beauty!

Parker
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4 posted 2000-05-30 01:57 AM


I'll echo Liz, on this, a beautiful discriptive wakening. Martie, you describe the beauty of the morning soo well.

Bravo...

Parker

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5 posted 2000-05-30 04:51 AM


WOW Martie, I loved every single line, such beauty... *sigh*   Thank you.< !signature-->

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)




[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-30-2000).]

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2000-05-30 06:42 AM


So picturesque and dream-like Martie ... you've given night's surrender an enchanting, almost human quality ... wonderfully written!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-05-30 06:57 AM


Martie~
Just the MOST BEAUTIFUL poem.
Look !  The rhyme is even gathering
in the curtains !

'lays me down against this lapping
quiet water’s weaving light.'

Simply serenely seductive.
You make the day begin on a smile.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~
  


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Mike
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8 posted 2000-05-30 08:46 AM


I awoke this morning to the sunlight streaming through the window and the beauty of the pen of Martie flowing like a gentle stream...     me thinks it is going to be a wonderful day in Kansas.
Denise
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9 posted 2000-05-30 09:59 AM


What a beautiful morning, Martie! Absolutely beautiful!

Denise

epoet
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10 posted 2000-05-30 10:29 AM


vibrant rays are aglowing,
now this poems started
my creativity flowing.
really like the  way you described the morning, close my eyes and feel the sun and warm winds blowing.  take me away......


 P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love


Balladeer
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11 posted 2000-05-30 10:42 AM


Now wait a minute!! Isn't it enough that you have to show us that you're the master of free verse and now you slip into rhyming country and take over here, too?????

Well, please stay, ok? Your poetry is beautiful, Martie, in any style you choose  

Sudhir Iyer
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12 posted 2000-05-30 11:57 AM


Ohhhhhhh, such a picturesque delivery of message, Martie, this is way greater than great...

Thanks for sharing this one...

Regards, sudhir

 Hey you, out there in the cold,
Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me?
Hey you, standing in the aisle,
With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me?
Hey you, don't help them to bury the light.
Don't give in without a fight.
Hey you, out there on your own,
Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me?
Hey you, with your ear against the wall,
Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me?
Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone?
Open your heart, I'm coming home....

by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall

LngJhnAg
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13 posted 2000-05-30 12:14 PM


Martie - this was so sweetly sung - I can see the tree in the new blazing light - you captured this time so well!
Martie
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14 posted 2000-05-30 12:51 PM


Wow!  I'm overwhelmed by the response to this poem...I don't usually write in rhyme because that form of expression doesn't come easily to me, but this poem just became, all by itself.  Must have been the muse I bought from Liz for $20.00.  Thank you all so much for your kind and sweet replies--you have made my day!
Elizabeth
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15 posted 2000-05-30 01:21 PM


Good morning, good morning...beautiful!

Elizabeth


 "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!"
-The Crucible


poetFemmeFatale
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16 posted 2000-05-30 03:37 PM


Wow, so many breathtaking lines in this, it's hard to pick my favs!  This is just exquisite Martie!  You have really outdone yourself with this one.....I'm still in awe, I think I'll read it again!  Lovely!!  
RainbowGirl
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17 posted 2000-05-30 04:41 PM


I'm with Liz Martie, this will become the favourite for me...kudos!!

HUSG

Martie
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18 posted 2000-05-30 04:44 PM


Good morning Elizabeth, I hope you're haveing a beautiful day!

Poet Jen..thank you so much for likeing this poem...I really admire your work as well!

Hi Rainbow--A favorite, gosh maybe I better try some more rhyme...thanks!

Irish Rose
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19 posted 2000-05-31 07:13 AM


your imagery is enchanting, ever word, it paints a picture. great work!!!

 Kathleen
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