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Morning Gathers in the Curtain |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Morning gathers in the curtain to displays a crimson light dazzled through the slant of shading across a flash of keen insight. Delivered in the softest rustle elfin feet are softly going with the moon's own fingers quieting to the sun’s more open flowing. Now departs delicious sweet dream yet lingers still profound delight lays me down against this lapping quiet water’s weaving light. Pewter tinted stars devoured by the cream that slithers in whispering open up with listening hark the softly growing din. Blaze this tree in sunlit splendor trace the flowering petal near now I feel night’s sweet surrender to the sun shine’s clean and clear. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read in my life. Martie, you get better and better and I don't understand how that can be. This is probably my favorite of yours, or close to it. I'm so glad I caught this before I went to bed Excellent, girl! Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Delivered in the softest rustle elfin feet are softly going with the moon's own fingers quieting to the sun’s more open flowing. Now departs delicious sweet dream yet lingers still profound delight lays me down against this lapping quiet water’s weaving light. Pewter tinted stars devoured by the cream that slithers in whispering open up with listening hark the softly growing din. -------------- Liz is right--- there is a certain class of poet, whose gift is so rare and perfect... that it gives them vision that the rest of us dont have... you my dear are one of those gifted poets. you can observe a moment in time, that otherwise goes unoticed(or taken for granted) and you weave into a tapestry of spun gold with your poets pen. this poem proves my point completely. the poem is breathtaking. take care, jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, Martie, Your muse and mine seem to be mingling, intertwining - this poem of yours sends me wafting into a sweet spring breeze of memories, until I know I have to tell you - lovely and breathtaking, my friend! Thank you for such beauty! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I'll echo Liz, on this, a beautiful discriptive wakening. Martie, you describe the beauty of the morning soo well. Bravo... Parker |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Martie, I loved every single line, such beauty... *sigh*  Thank you.< !signature-->Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 05-30-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
So picturesque and dream-like Martie ... you've given night's surrender an enchanting, almost human quality ... wonderfully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Just the MOST BEAUTIFUL poem. Look ! The rhyme is even gathering in the curtains ! 'lays me down against this lapping quiet water’s weaving light.' Simply serenely seductive. You make the day begin on a smile. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I awoke this morning to the sunlight streaming through the window and the beauty of the pen of Martie flowing like a gentle stream... me thinks it is going to be a wonderful day in Kansas. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
What a beautiful morning, Martie! Absolutely beautiful! Denise |
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epoet Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 291grand rapid,MI, usa |
vibrant rays are aglowing, now this poems started my creativity flowing. really like the way you described the morning, close my eyes and feel the sun and warm winds blowing. take me away...... P. J. Kotrch carpe diem A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Now wait a minute!! Isn't it enough that you have to show us that you're the master of free verse and now you slip into rhyming country and take over here, too????? Well, please stay, ok? Your poetry is beautiful, Martie, in any style you choose  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ohhhhhhh, such a picturesque delivery of message, Martie, this is way greater than great... Thanks for sharing this one... Regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Martie - this was so sweetly sung - I can see the tree in the new blazing light - you captured this time so well! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow! I'm overwhelmed by the response to this poem...I don't usually write in rhyme because that form of expression doesn't come easily to me, but this poem just became, all by itself. Must have been the muse I bought from Liz for $20.00. Thank you all so much for your kind and sweet replies--you have made my day! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Good morning, good morning...beautiful! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow, so many breathtaking lines in this, it's hard to pick my favs! This is just exquisite Martie! You have really outdone yourself with this one.....I'm still in awe, I think I'll read it again! Lovely!! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I'm with Liz Martie, this will become the favourite for me...kudos!! HUSG |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good morning Elizabeth, I hope you're haveing a beautiful day! Poet Jen..thank you so much for likeing this poem...I really admire your work as well! Hi Rainbow--A favorite, gosh maybe I better try some more rhyme...thanks! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
your imagery is enchanting, ever word, it paints a picture. great work!!! Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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