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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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emotion trapped locked inside, keeping time to madman's sighs... Not today-- forget tomorrow-- cries within this slab of sorrow--- weary, still she fears the horror (ah to sleep, her last reprieve...) terrified that she might dream and shatter night with memory's scream. But let it take what it might take-- reveal the art beneath the stone. He walks on shards of marble chips at last to taste her chiseled lips angry that her kiss is cold accusing fate that's his alone-- cursing hands that wrought this stone. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Very powerful serenity. . . Sometimes, it seems that there's nothing underneath the stone. . . unless you take out that chisel. . . . Excellent my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
He walks on shards of marble chips at last to taste her chiseled lips angry that her kiss is cold accusing fate that's his alone-- cursing hands that wrought this stone wow powerful stuff serenity, very dark and moody, a great read. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Do not listen to a word I say Just listen to what I can keep silent" Nicky Wire |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
ooooh I thought this was really neat  great job! ~H |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, the right lips can turn that stone to molten lava. Very deep poem, loved it. Parker....... xxxxx |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Powerful, it is ... It takes a scuptor to carve out whats inside a stone... The coldness of the stone is due to the matter inside, the strangled emtions and the hidden rage, and ... This is a very interesting read, serenity... regards, sudhir. Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
So true, and such a powerfully drawn comparison Serenity ... the shape within a sculpture is created by what the artist has "taken away" in chippings. What is left of "us" when someone chips away too deeply ... you've shown this so well, excellent read and thought-provoking! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
serenity, Great read...great job. ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Not today-- forget tomorrow-- cries within this slab of sorrow--- weary, still she fears the horror (ah to sleep, her last reprieve...) terrified that she might dream and shatter night with memory's scream. But let it take what it might take-- reveal the art beneath the stone. He walks on shards of marble chips at last to taste her chiseled lips angry that her kiss is cold accusing fate that's his alone-- cursing hands that wrought this stone. ------------------- WOW...this is EXCELLENT girl... very cool and very deep... amazing imagery a poet and a sculpter..you are so talented me sweet  later twin gator jm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sven-------thanx Sveetie--"let it take what it might take"--hugs m'friend. brian------thank you, noticed that you're a bit of a philosopher yerself... X Angel----thank you as well and btw, "sub rosa" is a favorite motto of mine- being "keeper of secrets", y'know? Parker-----GOOD ANSWER--warmed my heart... Suhir------much gratitude for your thoughtful reply--tho there is much subtlety in transformation, yes? Kit--------thnks to you for understanding Lorraine---gratitude to you as well for your kind attention. now--thanks to you all again--I'm now off in search of a grinder--seems I've got this chip on my shoulder--serenity exits grinning. |
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