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If From A Distance... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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To reach out and touch you- Is to touch the soul that binds me… To lengthen my distance- Is to forever severe our destiny… Methinks to gently abroad midway- If to see you at only a glance… To sway much deeper in face- Is to forfeit this unending chance… Collision brings tears of a fledgling- Upon hindered altar I must await… To challenge endurance of pledge- As star-crossed lovers ever debate… As wind remains my holy witness- Love may blow within the breeze… With I, steadfast in my distance- Wilted by Love’s eternal decree… Saturation of grace falls upon me- As I beg thee with mine eyes… To forever stay beside me- If from a distance, 'Tis Fate’s design… Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, I can feel the longing, the searching for a connection with your eyes, this is great girl....I have been there...you said it perfectly...*sighs and tears for memory of a star crossed love that is now in heaven* |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a powerful poem, filled with emotions,a great read. As wind remains my holy witness- Love may blow within the breeze… With I, steadfast in my distance- Wilted by Love’s eternal decree… Saturation of grace falls upon me- As I beg thee with mine eyes… To forever stay beside me- If from a distance, 'Tis Fate’s design… ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Devina, the longing here is just superb. . . to want someone that much, to even be happy to have them from a distance. . . just speaks to the heart. . . Excellent poem. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Devina, So bitter sweet this one is. Very touching my friend, and well writen I might add. Wonderful poem  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As wind remains my holy witness- Love may blow within the breeze… With I, steadfast in my distance- Wilted by Love’s eternal decree… Saturation of grace falls upon me- As I beg thee with mine eyes… To forever stay beside me- If from a distance, 'Tis Fate’s design… ------------ AWESOME poem D, you long and ache divine in this... and so nice to have a poem from you again. me thinks Fate's design will soon be defined. jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well devina, this was just amazing. I'd love to have somebody that would like to beg me with her eye's. There wouldn't be too much longing after that....  Very deep read here, I just love the flow and emotion. Parker |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
you are always so deep miss deepvina like a well and the water is your words and like sand in the hourglass these are the days of our lives...nice poem is what i mean |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Devina~ Beautifully stated. 'As wind remains my holy witness- Love may blow within the breeze… With I, steadfast in my distance- Wilted by Love’s eternal decree…' ('Wilted' ... my Royal fanny !) You blossom .... with the freshness of young grace ... sweet fragrance in your verse. *Keep Smiling* Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Corozon- I shall sigh with you dear!!! Brian- My utter thanks to you friend... Sven- Just as your work always speaks to my heart!! TY sweetie... Irie- Longing for that *one* often leaves a person bitter sweet, me thinks... TYJanet- I did catch an inspiration last night.. Glad you approve of my aching!!! James- Ok...you didn't finish what you were saying...she'd beg you- then what??? G* Thank you my dear... Walt- And I'm always curious as to what you'll say next m'friend...thank you... Marge- oh...so now your fanny is "ROYAL" huh??? ROFL I shall remember that one!! he he You always have an encouragement hun...tis why I love you most!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've traced the star-crossed lover's plight so well with your fluid and romantic sentiments Devina ... this was wonderfully done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Painful, but full of the wistful sweet longing that is your calling card---Lovely, my sis---you've been missed. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
So wonderfully expressed...Devina you have such a beautiful way of expressing yourself. Well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Kit- "star-crossed" indeed!! TY serenity- thank you my sweet sis!!! As always- I miss you too!!! tracie- You're always so kind dear..ty Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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