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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State 
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I saw you late last night But my presence you were unaware In the shadows my heart was breaking For I could see your pain and despair Like a phantom I sat in silence And watched you through the night As you slept I peered into your soul And I watched your dreams take flight The dream that flew the most Was one of you being set free To fly away and be happy Leaving behind your fear and agony My heart bled many tears For this soul that’s bound and tied There must be more than this Than this empty feeling inside So I looked deeper into your soul I found buried under some dust A heart made of soft pure gold, Joy, love, happiness and trust I also saw your gentle nature Of loving so tender and sweet Strength, courage and grace Emerging with each heart beat I saw a glimmer of hope Something that you kept I watched it working hard As the dust it slowly swept As this dust is swept away A splendrous place you’ll find Peace will be shared with you In body, soul, spirit and mind I saw you late last night I watched ‘till the break of day And I saw your very essence In such a beautiful way [This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-26-2000).] |
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aleisha Junior Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 10 |
Irie this is a beautiful poem. It feels like I am in the room with you. Good job my best friend. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Hey my Precious Gem! Thanks for your reply. I wish you were here so we could visit! Makes me smile everytime you end you replies with "My best friend"  Thanks a million ~Sheri |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
It's a very special thing when you can see into another's soul... They are precious and fragile things, indeed... May you always be able to share your dreams with this one.  Michael |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Whoa ~Irie - this is excellent work. Beautiful -----touching --- thanks for sharing ~netswan |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Michael...It is a special thing isn't it. I wish so much deep in my heart that this friend is able to find true happiness! Netswan...I'm glad you liked it! Thank you both for you wonderful comments!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is very beautiful, Irie! Very beautiful indeed! Denise |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
Irie! You are the one with the soft, pure gold heart! I am SOOOOO proud of you! I LOVE YOU! Mom [This message has been edited by Bbuzz (edited 05-25-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Irie, Fabulous poem!! Filled with sweetness and promise throughout. The end is just wonderful. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Irie, to have the sight is a precious thing indeed. . . you have captured that well in this poem. . . Truly your friend is lucky to have you. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As this dust is swept away A splendrous place you’ll find Peace will be shared with you In body, soul, spirit and mind I saw you late last night I watched ‘till the break of day And I saw your very essence In such a beautiful way ---------- this is a beautiful, well written and expressed dedication to your compassion for anothers pain..wondeful writing jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Denise Thank you so much! I'm glad you think so. That means a lot! Bbuzz Hey Mom, I think you're just a slightly biased, but that's ok. I still enjoy your comments! Love you too Mom!  And thank you LW Thank you my friend, I'm glad you enjoyed! Sven Yes, thank you and thank you. As I am just as truly lucky to have this friend! Again, thank you all for you wonderful and kind comments! I appreciate them all. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Jant You snuck in on me! Thank you so much for yourkind reply. I'm glad you think so much of this one. This poem means a lot to me. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
The title is perfect, you see much! This is wonderful work, wondefully expressed. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
ohh my....this is too good for words, its true what they say....when heart is full , words are few !! surely Irie, only a person so deep in love can see another so transparent.... i hope that person sees you equally well !! shilpi |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
EagleOne... Thank you so much! Perfect and wonderful. Two very complimenting words! Shilpi... And thank you too. I think when you love someone or even care about one so much...you can see! You've both made my night! ~Sheri |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Irie~ This is a most amazing piece. Words so sad and longing yet peaceful and touching. What a bag full of emotions you have shown here. ....nicely done..... Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This wonderfully full of powerful insight and emotions, beautifully written Irie! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Irie~ I surely enjoyed this. Friendship is so precious to each of us. Wonderful way you expressed your feelings. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Tracie, Kit and Marge, Thank you so much for your kind and wonderful words! Friendship is surely is a precious thing, and I seem to be finding many friends here at Passions. Thank you all! |
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