Open Poetry #7 |
Reverie |
Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
I am sitting in my room looking out the window pane, I hear a slight tapping I hadn't noticed it started to rain. As I watch the raindrops form into a daffodil, then suddenly disappear streaming down the sill. I look again to see if I can find, something familiar that will bring back to mind. The days of springtime bright sunshine and flowers the warmer days when we wiled away the hours. Then I awoke the daydream in demise, it's not raining but the teardrops falling from my eyes. [This message has been edited by Lorraine Nisbet (edited 05-25-2000).] |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Wonderful Poem - Lorraine - what great imagery ----and what an ending - achingly sweet. Loved it! ~netswan |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wishing and dreaming...are they not the same? Very nice piece. I enjoyed the journey. jwesley |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lorraine~ I wish you daffodils to brighten your day and love to brighten your heart. *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
netswan, Thank you. I loved your reply. ~Lorraine jwesley, Thank you much. ~Lorraine Marge, Thank you. You are a sweet lady. ~Lorraine |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Lorraine~ Excellent flow, imagery and twist at the end! A bittersweet piece to read, I relate all too well. I only hope that soon that the "teardrops falling from your eyes" become tears of joy and peace. This is the first poem that I have read by you and I am very impressed Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Very touching and bittersweet. . . too often the rain becomes our tears. . . hope that yours do indeed become tears of joy. . . Excellent poem. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Melissa Honeybee, Thank you for taking time to read. Sorry, you relate. ~Lorraine |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Melissa Honeybee, Thank you for taking time to read. Sorry, you relate. ~Lorraine Sven, Thank you. Your too kind. ~Lorraine [This message has been edited by Lorraine Nisbet (edited 05-26-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
very real... very very real you created a surreal feeling thanks for the dream and the tears |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
doreen, thank you much. ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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