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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Seven If her phone rings at seven will she be be at home waiting patiently? And will she be hoping and praying that it should be no one else but me? If it isn't would her heart feel a little despair. And if it is will she go ahead and tell me just how much she cares. Cause I'm patiently sitting alone over here and seven is extremely near. I still have enough time to ponder each and every word that I might say if only I could know for sure both of our hearts feel exactly the same way. I'd start with "I miss you Sweetheart. I Love your precious smile. I want to hold you close again just for a little while. Did I tell you that your beautiful voice chases all my blues away and brightens up a lonely day. And hon, my lips sure would appreciate one more kiss from your warm and silky lips." Oh please God I hope she won't just say "Hello hon, how was your day?" Cause before I dare to reveal all these feelings my heart yearns to share. I sincerely hope she will tell me how much she misses me and just how much she cares. Jameslee@May22,2000 |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Perhaps, James you do indeed still believe in a long term relationship. Only one who could hold such anticipation of wanting and missing that someone special, would feel this way. Hugs, Marina |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
James, I am on the edge of my seat here in anticipation of what happens next. I hope she said those words you long to hear, my friend. Brings back memories of a time long ago when I too had these thoughts in my head about the one I loved. Thanks for helping me to remember that time!! Great writing!!  LW |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You wrote this with perfect imagery! I could see this little movie of you in my mind... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Marina, Lone Wolf, and Poet DeVine for your wonderful responses. Yes Marina I do believe in long term relationships..but it is very important that the significant others also believes and acts accordingly. PoetdeVine I appreciate your response beaucoup. Your words have given me joy, comfort, and encouragement. James |
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Crystal Lynn Junior Member
since 2000-05-21
Posts 18Miami, FL. USA |
i know how u feel...hope everything goes the way you want it...id like to read other poems of urs if you have em..let me know.. Crystal |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
wish it was my phone ringing at seven. great poem. ~Lorraine |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Crystal and Lorraine I appreciate your responses. Crystal you can read previous poems for any poet by clicking on the Profile icon and then click on the place where it says Search all Posts. It takes a few minutes and you will be able to access all the poems that are still stored. Thank you for your interest. Lorraine it all starts with picking someone special out of the crowd and sharing phone numbers. Hope you see that special guy walking towards you soon. James |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very nicely said, James. I hope she left you breathless. Sometimes, though, we need to hear behind the words, and not just the words themselves. Well done. jwesley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you jwesley for reading and commenting. Do you mean she might not be telling the truth? Because I do have a problem with trust. James |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
There's nothing more heartwrenching than knowing that two people may feel the same way, but each awaits the other to begin by placing their heart on the line first (sigh) ... sometimes James, we do have to trust that our lives will be richer if, and when, we take that chance, and lead the way. This was a wonderful poem James ... Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-26-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
SBJ....I LOVE THIS SWEET POEM. it is written so sincere and tenderly wondeful words of uncertainty, hope and anticpation. great writing here...creative and imaginative use of the phone call and time. later sbj-gator jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you Kit and Janet for commenting. Kit I have been trying to lead the way but she doesn't trust men and she is not sure about me...we need to go slow and let trust and desires build on a solid foundation. Yes Janet I feel all of those, the uncertainty, hope, and anticipation. All of the experiences I am going thru each day are testing and questioning my love for her. I wonder how I will feel six months from now. James |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is Excellent!! Wow, I would hate to count how many times I've been on both ends of that call...neither is easy especially when seven comes and goes with no call...ahhhh sorry...lol floating in my own memories now A great piece does that!!Thank you for sharing. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
James i have been so far behind on posting...it is SO good to read some of your work. this piece was full of anticipation, hesitancy, hope, and love. it's apparent to me you're ready for those 3 words. i really hope she is as well. wishing you the best, amy great poem!! "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sounds to me like she'd be a fool not to be waiting there for you, James! Corinne |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you buttrefly, Aimster, and Corrine. I'm desiring and anticipating but not sure if I'm ready. She is the one. James |
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