Open Poetry #7 |
Anatomy of a Man |
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Anatomy of a Man A man is something of a brute Of manner quite like beastly hulk Consuming ghastly wrestling throws With savoring smirks and grimaced gawks A tense demeanor he assumes With beer attached to clenching fist And eyes glued to the Super Bowl With artery bulge on brow and wrist An awkward mass of bone and tissue Humor’s spirit honed and hewn To wallow in the witless pit Of dirty jokes and brash cartoons A head immersed in ego’s hole With ostrich view upon the world Until his heart is opened up And love is suddenly unfurled This creature turns to sheer delight With stars that twinkle in his eyes He thinks and sings and writes in words Of tender lovely lullabies He lights the days, he warms the nights He touches on the brink of bliss And wakes me in the shadow’s dawn With warm embrace and tender kiss Elizabeth Santos |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my buddy~ Awwwwwww ! What a hunk ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
"A man is something of a brute Of manner quite like beastly hulk Consuming ghastly wrestling throws With savoring smirks and grimaced gawks" Oh dear this is not me at all, I guess I am destined to be a boy forever. A great poem, loved the ending thought This creature turns to sheer delight With stars that twinkle in his eyes He thinks and sings and writes in words Of tender lovely lullabies He lights the days, he warms the nights He touches on the brink of bliss And wakes me in the shadow’s dawn With warm embrace and tender kiss an amazing images... "A head immersed in ego’s hole With ostrich view upon the world" great poem. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, The two extremes in the beginning and end are done very well. It makes for a very strong poem. Love Sy |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
See, guys are not so bad after all, once you get to know us and forgive our shortcomings! LOL ~~this was an enjoyable read~~ sure glad we turned out good...sometimes just takes a little training! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
You are so talented girl! You certainly know how to hit the nail on the head! LOL The way you took a hairy, burly blob, and turned him into a tender, loving man, was spectacular! You work wonders and magic my dear! I liked this alot! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Liz; Great poem as usual. Boy you really described the different sides of a man to a tee. It sounds like you found a terrific one though! Ellie 02 |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Marge, I never had one like this. Just poking fun at a lot of men I see around here. THanks, Liz Brian, Don't ever be like this. Be just the way you are (Much more appealing) Liz Sy, Never did like beastly hulks Who stare at sports with grimmaced galks I like a man with tenderness A gentlman at manner's best This was just for fun Liz Danny, Don't worry, you are all wonderful (That is, the men poets on Passions) Thanks Liz Poet Femme, Yeh, I know alot of men who fit this description to a tee, except I forgot to mention how they know their license plate number by heart, having played it in the weekly lottery so many times. hehe. Anyway, this is not my ideal man. Sorry, guys if this is you, no offense. Thanks poet femme Liz Ellie, Thanks, dear. Mine is very different indeed Thank you Love Liz |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, this is realy well done and humorous...what have you been thinking about lately? Hugs |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
So, uh, what's your point, Liz??? HULKSTER RULES!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, Glad you found some humor in this. Guess I'm trying to divert the mind a little Balladeer, No point at all, just fun. How about a rebuttal? Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I think you've covered about every possibly know type of man here except for maybe Richard Simmons. Would he fall within the definition of the first or the second man?James |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LOL... I'll never pretend to understand how the male animal thinks... but I can certainly second you on this being how they appear to think... hehe.... such wenches we are... Love ya guys!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed the tongue in cheek humour here, Liz. And what has the power to change the brutish hulk to a gallant gentleman? Why, Love, of course! I know this was a wonderfully rendered exaggeration, but thank goodness not all men are like this fellow! Thanks for the smile, dear Lady... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Love this one!! LOL....humour never goes amiss! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your humor is delightfully displayed here, Elizabeth! Denise |
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