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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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I Promise to Remember You set my self on fire whenever I touch your face. Never thought that Heaven and Hell could be in the same place. I’d give my life to hold you; And if I stay I might… My ears will always have your voice. My eyes won’t lose your sight. Please don’t say goodbye and let it end. Even farewells don’t last forever. I promise that I’ll hold you again. I promise to remember. I’ll not let go; I’ll keep you with me as I break onto the darker path. You’re my trail of bread crumbs; I promise I’m comin’ back. They say you don’t know your strength until the time that you are tested. We’ve all got our demons and we can’t stop ‘til these are bested. I’ll fight and fight. I’ll make amends. If it takes an eternity, I’ll see you again. I’m struggling to transcend to the light I need to find. Could this new horizon I’m looking for be in the world I left behind… Sometimes our paths, they cross. But I’m always fighting against you. Never said this was a Better beginning; Just said that it was New. We grew up way too fast. The present makes the past a blur. You moved on and I tried to bury it. We’ll never be the way we were. < !signature--> We all got somethin' we need to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 05-23-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Hi Ethan I really really enjoyed reading this, a great poem, some fantastic imagery, I love the second last verse. "We grew up way too fast. The present makes the past a blur. You moved on and I tried to bury it. We’ll never be the way we were". |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You set my self on fire whenever I touch you face. Never thought the Heaven and Hell could in the same place. I’d give my life to hold you; And if I stay I might… My ears will always have your voice. My eyes won’t lose your sight. ----------------- We grew up way too fast. The present makes the past a blur. You moved on and I tried to bury it. We’ll never be the way we were. Sometimes our paths, they cross. But I’m always fighting against you. Never said this was a Better beginning; Just said that it was New. --------------- WOW..way cool Ethan... I was looking forward to your response of the challenge... this is perfect. lots of your soul in this. So many questions... the hard ones to answer of ourselves. whats that old saying ... becareful what you wish for? but then again...what if she is the one...fate intended. good luck in findin the answers my friend.. let me know when you find them... let us all know *smile* Let me think about a title, need more caffeine than I've had yet this morn  should be something to do with the word fate me thinks tho, later, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent poem, Ethan_, Very delicate soul-stirring words.. Title, what about Being an ant, looking for bread crumbs...  Sorry.... just kidding. Regards, Sudhir Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Dear Ethan, How about "Transcending Paths" for a title? Very good poem, I liked the analogies you used here. ^_^ LadySofia That time of year thou mayst in me behold, When yellow leaves, or none, or few, do hang, Upon those boughs which shake against the cold, Bare ruined choirs where late the sweet birds sang. In me thou see'st the twilight of such day, As after sunset fadeth in the west, Which by-and-by black night doth take away, Death's second self that seals up all in rest. In me thou see'st the glowing of such fire, That on the ashes of his youth doth lie, As the deathbed whereon it must expire, Consumed with that which it was nourished by. This thou perciev'st, which makes thy love more strong, To love that well which thou must leave ere long. William Shakespeare |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ethan~ This is full of wonderful thoughts. How about your own line for the title - 'I Promise To Remember' Enjoyed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Dear all who replied, thanks for the suggestions. i appreciate y'all readin this. i took Marge's advice, though. (good call marge. i dig it.) JM- there are no answers...there is no spoon. =) j/k in truth, it's like ObiWan told Luke: "don't trust your eyes. they can deceive you. stretch out with your feelings." [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 05-20-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Ethan, Of all the responces this challenge got I, for one, think this was the best (just my opinion) All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Jeffrey, that's a bold statement. =) thanks for the support. i appreciate it. and thanks for the challenge. i been meaning to vent that stuff, and now i feel... better i guess. =)thanks again! We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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