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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-05-18 09:42 PM


~Cactus~

I'm like a cactus when you are around,
planted and rooted deep in the ground.
All thorny and spiked and protected,
a shield to a heart you've affected.

Blowing sand in your angry eyes,
for all the times you ignored my pleaing cries.
In this dry desert heat......
this time I won't be beat.

I am in a world in which you can't live,
I'm thirsty for a love you can't give.
Lifeless land surrounding......
echoes of your hatred pounding.

Sun so strong it's blinding,
a life without you I am finding.
Heat on your back, blistering your skin,
This time,....I won't let you win!!!

*This is a bit elementary (the language) but hey ,...you know?...Some days it's just like that for ya.



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Sven
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1 posted 2000-05-18 10:12 PM


Some days, yes it is Spitfire. . .

This is a great poem. . . I'm sure that we've all felt this way sometimes. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-05-19 12:59 PM


SpitFire~
Well, aren't we feeling 'prickly' tonight?
LOL !

I liked the 'elementary' elements.
Don't EVER apologize for your poetry, my friend.

~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Lone Wolf
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3 posted 2000-05-19 10:14 PM


SpitFire,
Great poem!!  I agree with Marge...NEVER apologize for what you write.     Hope to catch you around on ICQ soon....
LW

tracie66
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4 posted 2000-05-19 10:27 PM


Spitfire~
WOW...don't apologize my friend, thats what poetry is all about. Everyone has different styles and different ways of expressing their feelings and thats what you've done here. I say go for it, keep it up  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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