Open Poetry #7 |
This Way To The Amazing Egress |
Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Loyalty, living lustrous lives Originate ordeals, otherwise orthodox. When we wonder why either ever escaped either radiance ravishes reckless realism. Throughout the thrill heaven's hated heretics have an asocial assembly numerous, nameless, naive, narcissus. Lacking loves legalities or other origins vibrant violations void every enchanting egress. There is something inside me and I know it's good, but understanding is misunderstood. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Fantastic images great use of alliteration. I love this one. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Thanks I'm glad that you enjoyed. Alliteration is becoming one of my favorite styles. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I like! Takes a lot of work to base a poem around one element like this. K |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
excellent poem of Alliteration but over and above that this is a very cool poem with cool imagery and vision great writing. later, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
Personally, I don't care for most Acrostics, because they focus too much on that first letter and not enough on the content of the poem--even yours, old buddy. HOWEVER, this one is definately the exception to the rule. This one can actually stand alone without the acrostic. I enjoyed it. |
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