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The Strings of Your Closed Eyes
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The Strings of Your Closed Eyes |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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The Strings of Your Closed Eyes I could sing this song all day my love in glorious abandon spreading across the glass of your blue tune the length of you I play on the strings of your closed eyes with the silky husk of time’s finger tips that leaks such stories that my heart weeps blood and gets tangled in the twisted gossamer. Dance with me in dreamy dare in this fragrant rhythm I feel real and I will pull you to my strength and you will feed me chocolate and touch me with your tongued legs wrapped and pulsing across the place where a day becomes a life and for this time of stars and moons laughter will be our clothing and listening will be our food for this is what I whisper in my flowing lacy sweep of time I whisper now is forever sing to me forever love me forever. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-17-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
So lovely, I especially liked: "for this is what I whisper in my flowing lacy sweep of time I whisper now is forever" Corinne |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Simply magical, Martie, the images you can produce with your words......beautiful |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Martie! This flows so smoothly!  Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Whatever you write sings with abandon ... this plucks the heartstrings too. What a gal ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Martie~ This was a delight to read Your last stanza superb. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
magical is the word for this....sigh....wow |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks Corinne--i'm glad you liked it. Balladeer--thanks for the magical reply Denise--You always say such nice things Marge--Thanks my friend..love right back at ya Tracie--I'm so glad you found delight in this poem... Corazon--sure glad to have given you a sigh...thanks. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Life, Love, Passion, The purpose of Life, all wrapped up in one sweet love song. Simply Exquisite. Extraordinary writing Liz |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, I don't know but this seems a little different for you. Loved the word choices. These lines kinda jumped out at me... and you will feed me chocolate and touch me with your tongued legs wrapped and pulsing Well, they were a little to much for me, but i'll get my breath back. Parker |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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Liz--I'm so glad you read this and liked it...thank you for the exquistite, dear friend. Parker--calm down...and thanks so much for the read. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow oh wow, I can't even explain what all I just experienced while reading this! Superb, and what a poem! Talk about taking the reader on a trip! Well done to say the least! I think I better go reread it! hehe I think some of it went over my blonde highlights! Whoosh!  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Martie, that was quiet beautiful. magical, vivid imagery. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Martie!! Just sings with the knowledge of love and comfort... Excellent!! ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, once again your poetic sorcery delights my mind...oh so magical, this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"and I will pull you to my strength and you will feed me chocolate and touch me with your tongued legs wrapped and pulsing across the place where a day becomes a life and for this time of stars and moons laughter will be our clothing and listening will be our food for this is what I whisper in my flowing lacy sweep of time I whisper now is forever sing to me forever love me forever." as much as I liked the entire poem and the beginning - Thes last lines touched me so very much - I felt I had to post them here. I don't think I need tell you why. Thank you for calling it to my attention. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh I can't beleive I missed this! this is so beautiful so magical and the ending lines made me melt. Love it Martie Maree. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Magnificent! A jewel of a poem sweetMartie... *~coco~* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sweet....makes me want to go there...or any place like it, if there is anyplace like it. I wish I'd stumbled upon this poem long ago. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When the time is right, this is ripe for a repost. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I was thinking EXACTLY the same thing. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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