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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland

0 posted 2000-05-17 05:27 PM


Through the gaps in my venetian blinds
my hand slowly wipes off the dust of all past lives.
I am gazing at eternal sky, and a dew drown meadow,
to plant my spirit and bury the seeds of my sorrow.

Hold myself naked before the mirror,
the icy dew kisses my skin with a fresh tremor
View my ideology proudly,vanity's the perfect sin.
My agony dies to cultivate a beauty held within.

Optimism in the waking hours of dawn,
I feel alive since the first moment I was born.
Purified in waters of a new horizon
I am harmony, a sensitivity to celebrate on tongue.


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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-05-17 05:38 PM


Through the gaps in my venetian blinds
my hand slowly wipes off the dust of all past lives.
I am gazing at eternal sky, and a dew drown meadow,
to plant my spirit and bury the seeds of my sorrow.
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View my ideology proudly,vanity's the perfect sin.
My agony dies to cultivate a beauty held within.

Optimism in the waking hours of dawn,
I feel alive since the first moment I was born
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OH MAN...
I dont even know how to respond to this.
YOU went WAY deep for this.
this is awesome brian, and so very cool.

I was gonna try this challenge but there aint no way I can touch this.
excellent writing...
poet-genius-you are.
later-bri-gator
jm

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-05-17 06:45 PM


Brian, agree with JM, this is wonderful writing.  Nice response to the challenge!
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2000-05-17 06:49 PM


Wonderful Brian ... excellent response to the challenge ... I enjoyed this!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2000-05-17 10:34 PM


Brian,

Challenge exceeded!!  Wow!!!  Powerful and deep thoughts emit from this piece.  Just wonderful!!!  Loved it!  

LW

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
5 posted 2000-05-18 01:21 PM


Thanks guys for all your cooments, you are all too kind.   It looks like my writers block is finally over, I just finished another poem today. Heh Janet, oh you are sure a kidder. I know that you could write something in your sleep that would overshadow my little poem, come on take on the challenge I know your positive attitude would suit the task perfectly, I had to watch barney the dinosuaur to be in a happy mood so I could write the poem.    
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
6 posted 2000-05-18 05:35 PM


Wonderful meeting of the challenge,
Brian --)

netswan


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