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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-05-16 01:26 PM



My Lady of the Glen



She steps, shed from her skirts,
upon the cool and glowing glen
Tonight her treasures unspoiled
by the hungry eyes of men

She walks slowly, heels and toes
sinking softly in the soil
Her only chaperone, Darkness,
offering nighttime's fragrant oil

She allows the company, gladly
as in night she now abides
For daylight memories haunt her
shadows shade her dreaming eyes

She hears what others whisper
how a woman of such grace
should turn away the brutal night
and share her pretty face

But night is not her enemy
nor is its coverlet always cold
In earnest, night caresses soft
what daylight used to hold

For there were days behind her
when love and laughter played
and songs and straw hat Sundays
brought joy to the home she'd made

But days and nights churn onward
and tumble, fruitless, through the years
and shame and loss grow mightier
than a young woman had ever feared

And soon her life has passed her
and all that now remains
is a need to walk the glen at night
in the peace that dark sustains



Dear LadyClaire



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brian madden
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1 posted 2000-05-16 01:43 PM


That was quite beautiful, it has a classical feel to it, Excellent read

Stunning images I really like the lines,

"should turn away the brutal night
and share her pretty face"

"In earnest, night caresses soft
what daylight used to hold"

"But days and nights churn onward
and tumble, fruitless, through the years"

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-05-16 02:05 PM


But night is not her enemy
nor is its coverlet always cold
In earnest, night caresses soft
what daylight used to hold

For there were days behind her
when love and laughter played
and songs and straw hat Sundays
brought joy to the home she'd made

---------------
Claire this is--
exceptional,
exquisite,
and excellent...
and gives me SUCH POET ENVY!!
this is a breathtaking poem.
take a bow my dear *smile*
jm

Denise
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3 posted 2000-05-16 02:39 PM


Excellent, exquisite, exceptional, yes they are.....but even these words don't seem to capture what I want to say about this! I am at a loss for words, Claire. I think this is now my favorite of yours to date. BRAVO! WELL DONE! And yes, I too, envy your writing ability!

Denise

Parker
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4 posted 2000-05-16 02:43 PM


Claire, this is wonderful, as always with you.
I think I'll take a walk in the Glen tonight,
and see what lovely beauty, is comforted by the moons soft light.

Parker

Beki
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5 posted 2000-05-16 03:03 PM


beautiful classic storytelling!
TerryW
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6 posted 2000-05-16 05:57 PM


Claire~
     Lovely, my dear!  Very beautiful story unfolding within your sweet lines of rhyme!  I like this a lot!




 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Meadowmuse
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7 posted 2000-05-16 06:24 PM


Brian, thank you. I enjoy classical poetry and do tend to write after its form and style.

Janet, thank you, my friendly poetic peer...no envy need be necessary though.

Denise, thank you very much. You know, I had not had time to really sit down to poetry for several days, and today I had to have something to take my mind from this house closing! I'm glad you like this one.  

Parker, thank you...I will be watching for you...  

Beki, awfully nice of you to read and let me know you enjoyed this...thank you.

Terry, I'm glad you liked reading this, and thank you, in earnest, for letting me know.

Thanks to all for such encouragement...it feels like I've just come home again... *sigh*

~ Claire


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8 posted 2000-05-16 06:34 PM


What a wonderful scene you have created here. I can almost hear the cicadas singing and feel the dampness in the darkness of the night.....beautiful work, Claire.
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9 posted 2000-05-16 07:45 PM


Claire~
There is a Victorian elegance about this piece.  Such a lovely render that calls to mind the glen of enchantment.

Sweet lady, this is so you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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LadySofia
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10 posted 2000-05-16 08:40 PM


Dearest Claire,

Your poem seeps into the flesh and demands to be digested. It was so beautiful! Good luck in your poetic future.

^_^ LadySofia

HelmutB
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11 posted 2000-05-16 09:04 PM


Romantic, enchanting these are words that come to mind
So full of feeling, hidden deep inside
Beautiful the way you layed each line
Exhilarating, sheer devine
Claire if I wouldn't know better
I would say, you have outdone yourself
Bravo is all this humbled soul can say.
(you)
But I know, there is yet more to come

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Meadowmuse
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12 posted 2000-05-16 10:18 PM


Balladeer, thank you, in earnest, for reading and for your thoughtful response. I thought I heard the cicadas this afternoon, and naturally my mind began to wander about...

Marge, you know, you say the nicest things...thank you for the smile you've given me this evening.

LadySofia, awfully good of you to read and offer such kind commentary...thank you!

My Helmut, dear one...thank you
((you))

~ Claire



 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


CMGrimm
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13 posted 2000-05-16 10:56 PM


stunningly beautiful,
as always dear Claire.
As your words work their magic
intrigue fills the air.

A hint of sweet scents
and a lock of her hair
I'll close my eyes now
and forever be there.

Thanks for a wonderful read.


chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



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14 posted 2000-05-17 12:38 PM


I do indeed bow to the fairest Lady of the Glen. . . a woman of true grace and passion. . . a woman who has known the light. . . and now embraces the dark. . . and communes with it. . .

Claire, this is truly inspiring. . . methinks that your Lady of the Glen could inspire kings much as the Lady of the Lake did for Arthur. . .

Truly superb my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Martie
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15 posted 2000-05-17 01:40 AM


Claire, your poetry is always so excellent...and this is no exception...it envelopes in the mood of the glen and feel of her sad heart. Just beautiful!
Enotneicna
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16 posted 2000-05-17 04:40 AM


Claire,
You conjure such images so easily.....graceful, gentle, like a breeze blowing throuh your glen.......you sweep us away...........thank you!

 Words are my medicine.
Read and live and love and heal!



Kit McCallum
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17 posted 2000-05-17 05:54 AM


This was incredible Claire ... it flowed so beautifully with imagery, I found I did not want it to end. Exceptional work!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Sunshine
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18 posted 2000-05-17 06:35 AM


Ditto all of the above...very hauntingly calm, peaceful...
hoot_owl_rn
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19 posted 2000-05-17 01:28 PM


Claire...this has such a haunting aspect to it. The words remain in ones mind far after you've finished reading them  
Meadowmuse
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20 posted 2000-05-17 07:36 PM


Chris, thank you for such a dreamy and poetic response...

Sven, you are far too generous, but I must admit to being flattered by your fanciful notions. Thank you, my friend...

Martie, thank you. With as exceptionally as your talent shines, I always take your words to heart.

Enotneicna, how lovely your response...thank you so much for reading this.

Kit, thank you for reading and letting me know how much you enjoyed. I am so encouraged by your kind words.

Sunshine, thank you for reading and letting me know you enjoyed it.

Ruth, I'm glad you liked it.  Thank you, my friend.


~ Claire

  

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


JamesMichael
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21 posted 2002-04-20 06:43 AM


Enjoyed...James
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