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Don't Take It Lightly
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Don't Take It Lightly |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Have you ever hoped for death? Can that be taken lightly? To heave sighs with every breath And think upon it nightly Tiz a mature wish to die? Even child can hope to fade He will blink one tired eye And covenant he has made Where does the desire begin? Does it develop like a rose? Is it enveloped in my sin? Is it steeped in manic’s woes Mark my words and cut a hole Cut my heart with precision Take a sample of my soul Based on science your decision Sow me up and make me right Give me all your yellow pills Shake your head with high delight I’ll choke on them to cure my ills [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-16-2000).] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
WOW Walt......Its not normal to see such writing from you. I hope you are well....There are some very strong statements in this and the feelings show through very clear. A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
naw i'm fine mister knight i'm just on the roller coaster is all |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Oooh, how could I pass up a dark one from walt? I love this walt, I really do. I love the introspective, yet satirical look at suicidal thoughts. The last stanza gives me a strong feeling of sarcasm. Superb work here walt  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt, what a shocker coming from you! Tis dark indeed, but oh so well written. Some good questions here... Where does the desire begin? Does it develop like a rose? Is it enveloped in my sin? Is it steeped in manic’s woes |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Walt, I think you need to walk on the ground a bit, get stablized I fear for your sanity...LOL This is great writing and the thoughts are very interesting. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Curing all our ills is not always as easy as popping a few pills, is it? Interesting, thought provoking poem, Walt. Denise |
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