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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2000-05-15 11:20 AM


I really don't know what this is all about. Maybe a good example of bad writing  , or something similar. OR is it something otherwise???

If it is awful, sorry for posting this one.  

I think it comes from the fact that hidden deep inside, I had an egoistic feeling about what I wrote...now I know where I stand, Floor -1 in a 100 storeyed building...

Crushed Ego
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Once upon a time,
It was not so long ago,
Could hear the distant bells chime,
When my heart pumped up with ego.

Used to feel like a real king,
Of poetry, verse and writing,
Dwelling inside me deep craving,
With hedgehogs, rats of guilt running.

Forgot all about sincerity,
Worried about this selfish being,
Start writing about my own suffering,
While feeding on others' anxiety.

Self-pity was perhaps the only motive,
Sympathy was probably the only goal,
The world trapped inside me, made me pensive,
Being an emperor was the only role.

Suddenly without no rhyme nor reason,
I made a foray into Passions,
Felt that I had been before in an act of treason,
Making self-importance passé, a statement the fashion.

Little did I know that the friends from PIP,
Would fill into me a forward motion,
How I have progressed from then on, is a guess-trip,
This is where poets have views and notation,

Many great ones, some exquisitely brilliant,
And all this time to myself, I had been so adamant,
Though my ego has since then been blasted,
But it was great fun while it lasted.

Now as I venture in this New World,
Posting my views and many a poem,
I hope that my poetic ego does strike gold,
And gather pleasures from accolades before I go home…




 Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.

© Copyright 2000 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
1 posted 2000-05-15 11:35 AM


Introspection is always good for the ego,
Sudhir.  We see ourselves with clarity,
and then we can love ourselves for who we are, making improvements along the road of life.

Corinne

Sunshine
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2 posted 2000-05-15 11:56 AM


Treasured words from within thy heart
tales of broken spirit to impart
less they ruin thy soul deplete
to share makes thy love complete...

Passion, oh light do shine!
words of many, some of mine...
to share and share alike or to one
to gain wisdom, to have re-begun

my trip to glory, or just to share
pleasures many, and woe to despair.

~~~

I look for your name, and enjoy each word.

Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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3 posted 2000-05-15 02:52 PM


We all start from the same place and grow. You are not alone in your journey!  

Denise

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
4 posted 2000-05-15 05:30 PM


Corrine, Sunshine, Denise,

Thanks a lot for reading this stuff, and the encouraging words that you beautiful peopl have for me here....

Warm regards,
Sudhir

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