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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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Somewhere Hidden The cold dark ache of rejection and the haunting tale that it tells born into a world of conflicts everyone else gets glorification. Sometimes I feel I have no mind no brain inside to function right a hollow chamber filled with coal seeing a road I keep failing to find. They say it's paved for me to drive black asphalt the whole darn distance still no clue how to wind up there all I know at times is that I'm alive. I feel warm skin attached to me yet inside feels colder than ice chambered halls of ice cold nothing freezing into someone I cannot be. Where's the exit from this prison or will the walls be closing in? The cookie monster wants his cake as my skins warmth has already risen. Am I in here somewhere hidden can I come out to play someday? Will I be accepted as me or will I be in a world forbidden? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The "me" inside you is wonderful, Gloria... No need to stress - You're great just the way you are - Keep smiling, my friend..  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very thought provoking poem losty i hopes you not in the dumps |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Nan: Thank you, I am smiling this was just my mind playing around.  Walt: Thanks, no dumps here I'm happy as can be. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Whew...this one says a great deal. I myself like it when you come out and play with words |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! I think this is now my favorite of yours, Gloria! I can relate well to these feelings that you have so skillfully expressed. Life can get a bit confusing and scarey at times, can't it? Denise |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
You know, I think I've passed you now about 4 times...? Are we trying to find that same "road" ? hehehe Honk next time we pass, ok? (Red Chevy Z71) You'll see me waving! LOL Girl, I like how you take a painful and serious topic, and then throw in the cookie monster in there somewhere....  That gives the reader a chance to let out their breath they're holding, with a chuckle!  Very nice read, and I'm so glad you really are happy! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Ruth: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed. I had fun playing with this one. Denise: What a compliment, I thank you very much. confusing and scarey that's why I run. Genn: You have me laughing, I think if we were on the same road we would not be passing each other we'd have a head on collision...LOL Glad you liked the cookie monster he bribed me to have me put him in the poem, he offered me an Oreo cookie and I just couldn't refuse. Thank you for reading glad you enjoyed the poem it was interesting to write too. [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 05-11-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh gads Gloria! I hadn't thought of it THAT way!  I tell you what, you stay on your side of this crazy road, and I'll stay on mine, then we'll be alright! Oh...um...I'm the one swerving alot, and knocking over farm animals, so I'm not promising that I'm staying on the pavement here.....ok? Just warning you. Seatbelts please!! ROFL |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
PLUS, I've taken out a few pedestrians along the way...(accidently of course!)....ahem...they all happened to be male. ROFLMAO |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Back up you go.....this is too good to get sunk so soon!! Denise |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
MAkes me think. I really like it Your work is truly inspiring!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Great poem, "Am I in here somewhere hidden can I come out to play someday? Will I be accepted as me or will I be in a world forbidden?" this is a thought that used to plague my mind alot, but as hard as it seems, just be yourself. A great poem, I really liked the cookie monster line. "To be nobody but yourself in a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you everybody else means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting". E. E. Cummings |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Genn: you got me laughing again, you are crazier then me. The world better watch out if we ever go out on the town together...LOL Denise: You are so kind, thank you. Becky: Thank you very much. Brian: Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Sorry, my computer has the hiccups...LOL [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Big time hiccups, please forgive me. [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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