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Until I Remember |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 My day was moving along perfect And then like a lightening strike Your memory shows my heart’s defect Bringing with it smiles and pain alike I feel the caress of your words on my heart As potent as if you touched my skin And the pain of being apart I’m transported there again Within a moment it all came rushing back The pain and the joy I’ve tried to forget Reminding me of what I lack Filling my heart and soul with regret I still see the sparkle of your eyes The light of your laughter in my day The way the clouds parted in my skies How you became my life in every way What I wouldn’t give for a moment with you To tell you all that you still make me feel I’m ashamed at my fear to share this with you All that felt so right and so real I just wanted to love you And that was no problem at all Then through my fingers it flew Leaving me with only your name to call Oh how I want you back in my life To take away the ache in my soul The pain of loosing you cuts like a knife With you I always felt whole Now that you’ve gone I’m left to wonder If the love was from me alone The cracking of my heart sounds like thunder And the tears soaking me to the bone I’ll scream to the dark in the night And pray that the feelings fade away That your memory leaves my sight As this blanket of hope begins to fray |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OMG!!!! WOW!!! again WOW... i am BLOWN by this poem... dont ever tell me again...you cant go this deep to write... this is SO damn good...and SO damn honest It just builds and builds with each verse, each emotion stronger than the next. ******* Oh how I want you back in my life To take away the ache in my soul The pain of loosing you cuts like a knife With you I always felt whole Now that you’ve gone I’m left to wonder If the love was from me alone The cracking of my heart sounds like thunder And the tears soaking me to the bone I’ll scream to the dark in the night And pray that the feelings fade away That your memory leaves my sight As this blanket of hope begins to fray ****** i have nothing left to say but... DAMN I WISH I WROTE THIS ONE *smile* i could kiss ya for this one SS... love ya jm |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
That is a wonderful piece. I must say...one that simply touched me. Great work!! -Holly |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
B.D.C., I agree with JM....WOW!!! Such raw emotion and sadness. We all feel this way at one time or another. Hang on to that hope, my friend. It will get better!!  {{HUGS}} LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Wow...I am at a loss for words here....I will have to agree with Janet on this one; so deep, so raw, so powerful. Excellent work. Christina =^..^= |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Butterfly ------this poem is a masterpiece ------the subject is very painful - but written with power and style. Hugs from netswan |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Butterflies~ I have felt these exact words.... I feel as though I've just read a secret part of me. I love this.-SEA |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
"The cracking of my heart sounds like thunder" WOW With this poem I could hear that thunder all the way over here. Sewing the edges of that fraying blanket for you! This is sad but wonderfuly written and expressed! Thank you for sharing |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
WOW indeed Butterfly, you have moved me to tears with this one. Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
J.M. Ok so maybe it's not that I can't so much as I don't want to But once it's out....it feels so much better. Thank you my dear sweet S.S. just know that you are there makes it all ok...**AW Hugs** Luvs Ya!!Holly* Thank you and to know that it touched you is an honor. Welcome to Passions!! L.W.* I know I can see from you there is always a light at the end of the tunnel, no matter how dark and how long it is. Thank you.Christina* Poetry is allowing these emotions to heal...finally Thank you so much for reading.Netswan* Thank you so much...**AW hugs** to you SEA* Thank you for reading, "a secret part"...yes it's one I would like to keep secret too but then....I remember. Take care! Irie* Use some REALLY strong thread for me Thank you for reading and your kind comments.Eagle* **handing you kleenex** so sorry. Thank you for reading my dear friend. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful and touching, Butterflies. Very well done! Denise |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent BDC!! This one speaks powerfully to the way that memories can just sneak up on us when we least expect them. . .sometimes, I wish that we didn't have them. . . Great poem. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was incredibly emotional and powerful Butterflies ... it touched my heart with memories I thought I had forgotten ... beautiful work. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Butterflies, memories can be a blessing and a curse. This was wonderful, you show your heart honestly. Hugs my friend. Parker |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Beautiful poem.It's a differnet poem from the others.I like. [This message has been edited by vandana (edited 05-13-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW...WOW...WOW Great poem BDC All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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rene Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 113 |
MEGA bdc |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Thank you all so much for your replies and for reading, I could never express how touched I am by all the kind words and caring expressed in your words. B.D.C. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Butterfly, I can't tell you how much this poem means to me. It's printing right now. You have so beautifully expressed all the emotions and feelings I am going through right now. Exactly. "Oh how I want you back in my life To take away the ache in my soul The pain of loosing you cuts like a knife With you I always felt whole" I love your writing. It inspires me, touches me, and makes me cry and smile. Thank you. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Lori* I'm the one that is grateful, your poetry has touched me and echoed my heart and soul many times, thank you for reading and replying so kindly. |
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CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
This poem really touched me. I know the feeling. You expressed yourself so fluently. I look forward to your posts each day when I get home. Please remember that time heals all wounds. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
I wish I could say that I didn't know EXACTLY where this one came from. =) You've spoken so many words here that would have been written so many times over the past five years if I had only had your talent. =) Thank you for sharing. This is one of those I'd print (If only my printer had ink in it... ) --Dave"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
CS* I wanted to thank you from the bottom of my heart for your kind reply, I try to remember that time heals....but then I forget so then I write Dave* It is I that wish I had your talents kind sir!! I think that alot of people can sadly relate to the "remember" factor Thank you for reading and for sharing your thoughts. The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams ~Eleanor Roosevelt~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I loved it a lot and I mean it.Enjoyed it. |
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