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Two Hearts Beating
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Two Hearts Beating |
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angelsamongus Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 70New York 
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Two hearts beating, never meeting. Fingers dance, in a trance. Words on screen, two hearts sing. Desires spoken, vows are broken. Secret found, by covenent bound. Flames extinguished, soon relinquished. Hearts left bleeding, forever needing. 6/2/00 |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sometimes that kind of pain is agonizing, and sometimes it is peaceful, because we learned something about ourselves from the experience.  I really enjoyed this. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Great rhyme and meter. An enjoyment to read. MaGNoLiaBLue |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great! I enjoyed this! Denise |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Sad, sad. A heartfelt story told in a few lines that jerk a tear to the eye. Well done. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You hit this one right on the heart Lori, well written with much wisdom! Thank you for sharing. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I must agree with everyone above! Very well done! *Clap clap* Keep up the good work!  ~Sheri |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
I enjoyed this one. Well written. |
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angelsamongus Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 70New York |
Thank you all for your comments. I was unsure of my posting this and almost deleted it. Thanks again, Lori |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is an excellent poem. It was clear to me from the start, that it was about an unborn baby who was lost. But that is because I have been there. You have written it in such a way, that the reader is able to read his or her own sorrow and loss into it, and that is what makes it a poem written by a talented poet. I am so terribly sorry for your loss. The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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