Open Poetry #7 |
In The stillness |
rene Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 113 |
in the stillness you reached, your fingers weaving harmony upon the air in the stillness you teached, with subtle and distinguished signs me to care |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hi rene... this is beautiful such a fragile, delicate well written piece. much said in a few well chosen and spoken words. nice work take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Rene* this is so beautiful, you used so few words but said enough to fill many pages. Excellent piece!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is really an excellent poem...concise with great meaning in a superb form. I like it very much. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
There is a lot in those 8 lines, beauty, love and security all explored with such gentle grace. |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Beautiful!!! excellent work that is so well written!!!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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rene Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 113 |
Thankyou chaps |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Very well written. Thanks for sharing. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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