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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA 
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In quiet night I silently dreamed That I could see for miles around Amidst a garden Full of clouds I could barely see the ground Above the mountains But below the sky I await the silent dawn I sit and stare And begin to smile As then I start to yawn Sleepily I lay Upon a cloud Thats floating up in the sky I twist and turn Ay my fading vision My dream begins to die Again I awake Amongst the clouds To the sounds of noisy grunts To my alarm I'm standing on The shoulders of giants Better to die, and sleep The never-waking sleep, than linger on And dare to live when the souls life is gone. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
LOL cute poem , the ending was very surprising netswan |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ooohh...I liked the "dreaminess" in this during the first part, but you kind of lost me at the end! LOL I have some blonde highlights, so I'm gonna blame it on that! ROFL  Interesting though to say the least!  You're very good at portraying the "dreamy" parts! LOL |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Great twist at the end. cool dreamy bits, I liked it.. a lot. |
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