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Untitled (I always said that Untitled was never a good title.....) |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA 
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She walked up to me and placed her hand gently along my inner thigh... If I hadn't known better I would have sworn that we had met before... She asked me to buy her a drink. I did. We left the hotel bar and she joined me for a nightcap in my hotel room... A rustic little room with all the fixins of a souped up hay loft. We sat on the tired old bed with the dark brown spreads and overstuffed pillows watching cheap cable TV and drinking the last of my Bartles and James... She leaned forward and kissed me... I could see her fake eyelashes barely clinging to the caked up mascara on her painted face. I could smell the years of hate and disgust and general nastiness in her hair as I slowly undid her halter top and let her unfasten my belt. I looked up just in time to see Gilligan staring tirelessly into MaryAnn's eyes....and I wished that that could be me.... Christopher M. Grimm Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
somethings dont need a title... this was a very cool read... and the honesty of the emotions was perfect. as was the reality of that last verse. excellent writing take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
reminds me of a similar experience I had, alcohol was also involved. Excellent poem.. I love the constrast of the last verse with the rest of the poem. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Thanks Janet and Brian... Your comments are always appreciated. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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