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~Eyes That Cant See~
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~Eyes That Cant See~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Eyes That Cant See~ If I was blind ... the way you seem to be... then I would be spared--seeing all that's dying right in front of me. Were there any witnesses ... were you notified... did you even mourn -- when all my hope and desire died. Your so oblivious...there are so many women living here inside of me. Would you even realize...if I were to set any of them free. Is it delusion that blinds ... every night lying here next to a stranger. Somebody should explain...warn you of denials danger. You wont give thanks--but you'll sure ask for favors. When did love become a chore, when did it become such a labor. Is there such a thing...as an innocent infidelity, its only a distracting illusion...to comfort this dying reality. What will it take for you to see--if I was bleeding out my eyes... would you then understand...would you then hear my cries. I wish I was blind... the way that you seem to be, Then I wouldn't have to watch...this love dying deep inside of me. Janet Marie **repost from Dark Passions |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
At first I thought this sounded familiar because I was living it--glad for the repost, tho... Now, I'm curious---you'll have to send me a picture of this man...could it be possible we've got the same guy? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think this man exists for us all at some time...but not all men are like this, thank God..good poem.... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jan-- I not only read the words you posted in this piece...i FELT them. Your expressions here of raw emotion shot through my entire being. i could feel the fustration and the longing. i am glad to see that you are working it all out on paper. As always you have my deepest admiration and support. love ya much, amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Jan, Now you're scaring me. Are we twins separated at birth? You know, never knowing each other, but whose lives are remarkable similar. Every time I see one of your poems, I jump at them. It's remarkable. Unbelievable. Thanks for sharing these feelings. Lori |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wow Janet. . .some powerful emotions here. . . I can feel the sorrow and the despair. . . Great poem, hope that things get better. . . and like deVine said, we're not all like this!! --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
A sad poem JM -- don't let those other women out by themselves Can he be that blind? Hugs from netswan |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Janet, this poem really touched me. I know a lot about blinded males. Good job. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Jan, Powerful emotions...dying devotion A love swept 'way by the ocean The ocean of tears that you've cried While the love inside you dies All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Heartwrenching Janet Marie ... I could hear your cries loudly through your pen. If only a pair of glasses could open their eyes sometimes ... thank you for this powerful poem. /Kit |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Janet Marie... Oh, how sad and heartwrenching. I do hope you are feeling better these days. For your sake I hope he sees the light!! {{{HUGS}}} LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
J.M. I don't even have the words...just know that I know. |
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Twilight Tearstains New Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 8 |
Janet, your words have moved me deeply. I cannot express how beautiful, how incredibly sad this is...to have love die is so tragic. ~We are only truly lost when we've lost ourselves~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet this is incredible writing...very touching, so sad...I feel for you girl...I can only hope for bright sunshiny days in your future. "I wish I was blind..then I wouldn't have to watch...this love dying deep inside of me." And yet you would still feel the pain. Come on girl don't get so attached to men that don't appreciate you...I must watch my heart also. James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
You've employed an interesting perspective with this piece, Janet, and if is biographical in nature, I encourage you to keep writing, of course, but also to share your feelings with him, as best you can...though I suspect you've done a good bit of that already. You know I am an active proponent of expressive therapy, which includes writing, art, music, etc. but when dealing with issues involving another person, there is no end~all substitute for communication. (((you))) hugs tonight, my friend... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
beautiful.....just beautiful.... i can't begin to explain how your words touched me..i felt you pain in this poem.. keep writing more... Tia I'd rather have someone hate me for who i am,than to have someone like me for who i'm pretending to be |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Janet-This was most sad. Yes, some people are blind- I like the line You wont give thanks--but you'll sure ask for favors. Some people are selfish too. {{{hugs}}} for you. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh Janet...Claire said it all. I'll have you know, I sit here with big tears rolling down my cheeks now. Your words rip right through me, as I lived this for nearly a year, and let me tell you, it was hell. I wrote a poem about it a long time ago, and if I can find it, I will repost it here to share with you. And about that "innocent infidelity" thing? Well, I'd say, if you've made him aware of your pain, and he refuses to help you, then feel no guilt. He had it coming. Now that's probably the worst advice I've ever given, but no one understands this unless you've lived it. That line of ,"...every night lying here next to a stranger..." oh gawd....so many nights I'd lay on the very edge of my bed...clinging to the sheets....just wishing I could scream out and smack him a time or two!! How do two people who supposedly love eachother, grow so far apart, and not even care that they do? Okay...I'll hush now, as I'm crying such big tears, I think I'm gonna drown here. lol Girl, I am here to talk, believe me. This was painfully beautiful. You are definately getting GOOD at expressing your heart. Keep it coming! Love you! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
to each of you who replied to this... please know that I am so deeply touched by the amazing tenderness and understanding you share with me... there are just too many awesome replies here to single out .... for the advice, encouragement, hugs and tears... I am left nearly speechless and the simple words thank you seem rather inadequate at the moment. Im most touched and saddened by how many say they know this, live this, or did live it... but like so many times before in here... we are quiet comfort for each other. It truly does help knowing there are others who understand...though it would be so nice for us to all know contentment instead... BUT then what would we write about *smile* thank you all so much... love to ya too... take care, JM jeffery...TY for the sweet and lovely verse...a gift of poetry is my most fav thing. |
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